Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Peter,

I am writing to introduce myself as I have recently joined My Travel Deal last week only. I have been informed that you are assigned as my mentor.

Firstly, If I talk about my educational background, I have completed my BCA in Artificial Intelligence and Data Science. I started by professional journey with Global Academia as a Frontend Developer. Then I joined Air india as a Customer Service executive where I worked for two years. My last company was 3 Step Innovation Limited, which is a UK based company there I worked as a Data Analyst.

If I get stuck at any task then your guidance can help me. As I am new here so I need your help in understanding company's rules and regulations.

I you are free on next coming Saturday, then we can meet at a cafe near our company and can get to know each other better. You can tell me my responsibilities in company.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your prompt response

Yours faithfully

Aaryat

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requirements: you outline your BCA studies and roles at three companies, explain that you would value help with tasks and workplace rules, and propose meeting at a nearby café on Saturday. These details make the letter relevant and give the mentor a clear introduction to your background. However, the support you hope to receive is only briefly explained, and the meeting suggestion is not fully practical because “next coming Saturday” gives no time and does not check whether the café or day suits Peter. To strengthen the letter, specify the skills or workplace processes you want to learn and offer a time or alternative date. The main points are covered, but some are less developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: introduction, education and work history, the support you need, and a meeting proposal. Paragraphing helps distinguish these purposes, and phrases such as “Firstly” and “As I am new here” guide the reader through your points. Some linking is mechanical, however, and the repeated use of “then” in the work-history paragraph makes the progression sound list-like. The transition from asking for guidance to suggesting a meeting could also be smoother. In addition, “I you are free” interrupts the flow and makes the intended connection unclear. Use a wider range of natural links and connect each paragraph’s ideas more explicitly to improve the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to communicate your background and needs, including job titles such as “Frontend Developer” and “Data Analyst,” and phrases such as “guidance” and “rules and regulations.” The meaning is generally clear, but some word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise. For example, “started by professional journey” and “next coming Saturday” do not sound natural, while “tell me my responsibilities in company” could be expressed more precisely. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “My Travel Deal” and “Air india.” Aim for more natural workplace expressions and accurate company-name formatting. This would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and longer sentence forms, and most of your meaning remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors are noticeable. “I you are free” is missing a word, and “which is a UK based company there I worked as a Data Analyst” joins clauses without suitable punctuation or a relative structure. There are also issues with articles and sentence construction in “understanding company's rules” and “responsibilities in company.” Capital letters after sentence openings are inconsistent, as in “Firstly, If.” To improve, check each sentence for a complete subject and verb, use punctuation to separate clauses, and review articles and possessives. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentences easier to read.

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