Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A clean bill of health is necessary for everyone. Indeed, we can get all the vitamins from a healthy diet but in current era, it's quite hard to stick to organic and healthy food. I firmly support this ideology that a healthy diet can provide us all the important minerals and vitamins which are necessary for our daily intake.

Most of the people watch out for shortcuts and they are not willing to stay away from junk food and cold drinks but at the same time they want to have all the vitamins to remain healthy. That's why, they spend a large amount of money on buying vitamin pills. In addition, gym boys are also in need of vitamin and protein intake and thus they spend their money on buying these kind of stuff. I would say, it's also hard to burn off calories so most of the people take on vitamin pills to get rid of excess fat and cholesterol.

One of the most practical way to persuade people is to guide them about the advantages of doing excercise regularly. For this initiative, government should build free gym places for the public and also held seminars on diet and nutrition. In addition, Doctor's and nutrionist's should held awareness camp's in public places. By doing this, we can enhance awareness on healthy diet and can save young genreration from taking vitamin pills.

In conclusion, healthy diet is the only thing that can keep people fit and smart. people should spend more money on buying organic and pure food rather than eating junk food. It will increase people average life span and would increase the quality of life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions and maintain a clear view that a healthy diet is preferable to supplements. The explanation that people want a shortcut while continuing to eat “junk food and cold drinks” is relevant, and you offer practical measures such as free public gyms and nutrition seminars. However, some points are not fully focused on the questions: the claim that vitamin pills help people “get rid of excess fat and cholesterol” is unclear and needs support, while gym users’ need for protein is not explained as a reason for spending heavily on vitamin pills. Develop each reason with a brief explanation or example, and make the persuasion strategies more directly about making nutritious food appealing and accessible.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons and solutions, and a conclusion. The progression is easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “In addition” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. This already gives the essay a coherent arrangement, but some connections are mechanical or imprecise. For example, the paragraph moves from gym users’ protein needs to burning calories and taking pills without clearly showing how these ideas relate. The conclusion also repeats the preference for healthy food rather than drawing together the reasons and proposed solutions. Use clearer links between claims and explain how each solution addresses the behaviour described.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss health and nutrition, including “daily intake,” “excess fat and cholesterol,” and “diet and nutrition.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “A clean bill of health,” though it does not fit naturally as an opening claim here. Several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal, including “gym boys,” “these kind of stuff,” and “held seminars.” Spelling errors such as “excercise,” “nutrionist's,” and “genreration” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, but they limit precision. Choose more natural topic-specific phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some longer structures, including the contrast in “they are not willing to stay away from junk food … but at the same time they want to have all the vitamins.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “One of the most practical way” needs a plural noun, and “government should build” would be clearer with an article or plural form. In “Doctor's and nutrionist's should held,” the plural subjects and verb form are incorrect; use a plural noun and “should hold.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “people” beginning the conclusion. Review agreement, articles, verb forms after modal verbs, and sentence punctuation.

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