Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As per Doctors, a healthy diet can provide all the vitamins needed for the good health. However, some individulas still prefer to take the vitamins pills and they spend huge amount of money on it. In my upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss this problem and the possible solutions for this.

Firstly, moving towards the problem side, as per my understanding, some people they do not have any knowledge about the balanced diet and they do not have the enough education about health. Whenever they experience any health issue, they want to fix as soon as with the helps of these pills, and with the passage of time they become addicted to start taking these pills. Moreover, 90% of the people in our community does not have time to take care about their health and they do not go to their doctors for the routine checkups and blood tests. Thus, they end up spending huge amount of money on these pills.

Shifting towards the solutions side, the government needs to educate the people. To explain this, if the governments can start intiatives to educate

the people about the balanced diet, it can really make a big difference in their life. With the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a relevant reason for buying supplements: people may lack knowledge about balanced eating and seek a quick fix when they experience health problems. You also begin to address persuasion by proposing government education. However, the response is incomplete: the solution is not explained beyond the start of an initiative, and there is no conclusion or supporting example. The reasons are also quite general, with little explanation of why people choose pills despite doctors’ advice. The response contains 201 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250. Develop both answers with specific explanations and examples, and complete the essay so that each part of the task is addressed more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay structure, with an introduction followed by a paragraph on reasons and one beginning to discuss solutions. Signposting such as “Firstly” and “Shifting towards the solutions side” helps the reader recognise the intended sections. However, progression is limited because the solution paragraph stops mid-sentence at “With the”, leaving the argument unfinished and without a conclusion. Some linking is mechanical, and phrases such as “moving towards the problem side” do not create a natural flow. The reference in “they spend huge amount of money on it” is also not fully clear. Use straightforward topic sentences, connect each explanation to its result, and finish with a concluding sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “balanced diet,” “health issue,” “routine checkups,” and “blood tests.” There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “educate the people” and “make a big difference.” However, several expressions are awkward or imprecise, including “the problem side,” “addicted to start taking these pills,” and “take care about their health.” Spelling errors such as “individulas” and “intiatives” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording, while checking spelling carefully. For example, describe people as relying on supplements or becoming dependent on them, rather than using “addicted” without clear support.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if the governments can start initiatives … it can really make a big difference.” The main message is generally understandable, but errors occur frequently in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “some people they do not have” repeats the subject, while “90% of the people … does not have” has a subject–verb agreement error. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent in “a healthy diet can provide all the vitamins needed for the good health” and “spend huge amount.” The final sentence is incomplete, which further affects accuracy. Practise building complete sentences with one clear subject, and check agreement, articles, and singular/plural forms.

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