Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Peoples thinks the vitamins and minarals tablets are much affodable and available. Peoples gets vitamins and minarals because of their poor diet charts plan and habit.

A pill is much easiee and thicker for planning, preparing and following diet chat. Some indivisual is not enjoying fruits enough so they takes pill and nutrient suppliment easily. I think people spent so much money buying this vitamins instead of eating fruits and vegetables. People could be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills for making public awareness. I think if peoples want halthy they should make proper diet plan eats vegetable, meat,fruits etc. I think everyone should walk 40-45 minute dailf if they want to become healthy. I think public awareness and motivation people can make this problrms solve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a relevant attempt to answer both questions: you suggest that pills are convenient and that people may not enjoy eating enough fruit, and you mention public awareness and healthier meal planning as possible ways to encourage dietary change. However, these points are only briefly stated, and the response does not explain why people spend large sums or how awareness could change their choices. The advice to walk daily is not directly relevant to improving diet. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words: it contains 119 words, with 43 copied from the prompt excluded from the count. Develop each answer with explanations and a specific example, such as the convenience of pills for people with busy routines or practical nutrition education.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening body paragraph gives possible reasons for buying supplements, and the later sentences turn to ways of encouraging healthier eating. Some links, such as “because” and “instead of,” help show relationships between ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are placed together without clear paragraphing or explanation. The repeated “I think” also makes the response sound list-like, while “I think public awareness and motivation people can make this problrms solve” does not clearly connect the proposed solution to the problem. Use separate paragraphs for the two questions, and connect each main point to a reason or example with clear referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “vitamins,” “minerals,” “diet plan,” “fruits and vegetables,” and “public awareness.” This gives the reader a general sense of your ideas. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response harder to understand, for example “affodable,” “easiee,” “indivisual,” “suppliment,” and “halthy.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “thicker for planning” and “diet charts plan.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “convenient,” “balanced diet,” and “nutrition education” would help you explain your points more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can understand the broad message, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “Peoples thinks,” “they takes pill,” and “people spent so much money.” Articles and plural forms are also missing or inaccurate in phrases such as “takes pill” and “this vitamins.” The response makes little use of varied sentence structures, so ideas are often presented as short statements rather than developed explanations. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and using articles with singular countable nouns. Then combine related ideas with a controlled clause, for example: “Some people choose pills because they are convenient when they have little time to prepare meals.”

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