Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Consuming a healthy diet fulfills vitamin requiremmets' doctor says. Irrespective of the advice, a number of individuals spend a huge amount of money on multivitamins. This is attributed not only to unhealthy diet but to busy life, which persuades one buying pre-processed food. Encouraging people through social media platforms and conducting seminars in schools and working places can have a great impact on improving their diets.

Unhealthy eating habits including everyone's preference for fast foods, cooked on high flame washes off the beneficial nutrients from the food, for example, chicken cooked on high flame in restaurants removes all the beneficial nutrients, leaving only meat with minimal portion of useful nutrients. Also, due to hectic lifestyle, a large proportion of people depend on pre-processed frozen foods that do not contain enough vitamins. Proceesed foods available in the supermarkets are mostly meat products and not the vegetables' which are best sources of plant based vitamins,iron and minerals. Moreover, indoor offices and sedentary work life, weakens bony structure due to deficiency of vitamin D. Many people believe that their daily needs of multivitamins is not met which is why they buy vitamin pills.

Solution to the above mentioned problems can be solved by sparing time for one's health. Cooking different varieties of food at home, not only encourages everyone in the family to eat but also to remain healthy, for example, one must visit a dietician to inquire about daily dietary requirements and asking them to make a weekly or monthly menu which could be easily cooked at home.Also, cooking at home will allow you to try variety of dishes including chicken, red meat, fish, vegetables etc, which in right proportions can meet all the multivitamins requirements. Most importantly, social media adds and seminars conducted throughout the schools and offices will have a great impact on healthy eating habits. Adds depicting unhygienic methods of making processed foods leading to diseases can changes one's mind, diverting them to eating home cooked foods.

In conclusion, people spending money on multivitamins despite doctor's advice of consuming healthy diet is due to busy lifestyle and everyone's preference for pre-processed and fast foods. This can easily be addressed by making home cooked variety of foods rich in multivitamins and depicting harmful effects of eating unhealthy on social platforms and in seminars which can greatly reduce one's likeliness for outside food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response addresses both questions and maintains a relevant focus. It explains spending through reliance on fast and processed foods, busy routines, and concerns about vitamin D, then proposes home cooking, dietary advice, social-media campaigns, and seminars. These points are supported with examples, such as consulting a dietician for a weekly menu. This meets the core requirements, but some reasoning is unclear or not fully developed: the claim that high-flame cooking removes “all” beneficial nutrients is overstated, and the link between indoor work and buying multivitamins could be explained more carefully. The proposed campaigns are relevant, but the essay could show more specifically how they would persuade people to change their habits. More precise support and fuller development would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. The progression from causes to remedies is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Also,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Solution to the above mentioned problems can be solved” repeats the idea of solving, while the opening paragraph moves quickly from unhealthy diets to busy lives without clearly separating these causes. Long sentences in the solutions paragraph also combine several points, making relationships harder to track. Use more precise referencing and divide complex points into clearer sentences to make cohesion smoother and less dependent on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “hectic lifestyle,” “sedentary work life,” “dietary requirements,” and “plant based vitamins.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “pre-processed frozen foods” and “unhygienic methods.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “vitamin requiremmets,” “social media adds,” “cooked on high flame,” and “one’s likeliness for outside food.” Spelling errors such as “Proceesed” and “Adds” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “social media advertisements” and “likelihood of choosing takeaway food.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mix of simple and complex structures, including clauses with “which,” “although”-type contrasts, and examples introduced with “for example.” Most ideas remain understandable, but grammatical control is uneven, with errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction, and punctuation. For instance, “indoor offices and sedentary work life, weakens” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an unnecessary comma, while “Cooking different varieties of food at home, not only encourages” also separates the subject from its verb. The construction “Solution to the above mentioned problems can be solved” is grammatically awkward, and “which could be easily cooked at home” has an unclear reference. Review agreement and sentence boundaries, and simplify sentences when several clauses make the grammar difficult to control.

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