Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to Medical research Home made food contain a large number of vitamins while An Individual belive that spending big amount of money on Medicine gives vitamins. In my opinion, Spending on Too much money on medicine is better then making home food which become good for physical.

Firstly, Gurdaited students of MBBS research that home made food products have great number of vitamins which is good for physical fitness rather than use packed foods or junk food.Secondly, it is best because food also provides essential fiber and help your body absord nutrients more effectively.Vitamins have different job to keep your body working properly.

However, Doctors also suggest a vitamin suppliements and can lead to harmful build up or toxicity.Those paitents whose body is not recoverying from foods doctors adivce them medicine.In my opinion, Always consult your physician before starting any pills or vitamins.Moreover,Taking high-dose or unnecessary vitamins can harmfull for your health.For example, Majority people take vitamins from winter sunlight which give vitamin D and make stronge thes bones.

In conclusion, Home made food provide great vitamins as per physician said while most people obtain vitamins from medicine which is harmful. Most uses of medicine can demag your body organ such as gallbadder and stomch also so, use home food instead using unusual medicine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response is only partly successful in answering the two questions. It gives relevant points about why people use supplements, including that doctors may recommend them and that people believe pills provide vitamins, but the reasons are not clearly explained or supported. The second question—how people could be persuaded to improve their diets—is largely unanswered: recommending home-made food is a conclusion, not a developed persuasion strategy. The position is also confusing, especially in “spending ... on medicine is better then making home food,” which appears to contradict the later advice. The response is below the required 250 words, so there is limited space to develop the ideas. Address both questions directly, clarify your view, and add specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “However,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the broad stages of the response. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph discusses the benefits of food rather than explaining why people spend money on pills, and the next shifts between medical advice, toxicity, and sunlight without clear links. The conclusion repeats the preference for home food but does not resolve the unclear position in the introduction. Some linking words are used mechanically, and punctuation spacing makes boundaries between ideas difficult to follow. Organise each paragraph around one task question and connect each supporting point explicitly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “vitamins,” “physical fitness,” “essential fiber,” “toxicity,” and “high-dose,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make meaning difficult to follow, such as “Gurdaited,” “suppliements,” “paitents,” and “demag.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “great number of vitamins” and “vitamins from winter sunlight.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language for the task—such as “rely on supplements,” “nutrient-rich foods,” and “public health campaigns”—would help explain both people’s motivations and ways to encourage dietary change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer structures, for example “Doctors also suggest a vitamin...” and “Those patients whose body is not recovering from foods doctors advise them medicine.” However, the longer constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries make some ideas hard to understand. Examples include “Home made food contain,” “food also provides essential fiber and help your body,” and “which become good for physical.” The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear grammatical relationships. Use shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms, then add subordinate clauses only when their structure is clear. Careful punctuation and sentence separation would also improve readability.

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