Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays,it is trending to spend alot of money on buying multivitamins rather then having them through a healthy diet. The reason for this is the fancy advertisments and easy accesibility to oral vitamins. By promoting the public awareness campaigns and banning it to be sold over the counter can provide a solution.

From my perspective, people are spending hefty amounts on buying vitamin pills because the vitamin companies are running successful advertising campaigns both on print and social media. Public usually get attracted to them by seeing the list of benefits shown in just one pill and ease of ingesting it with a sip of water. For instance, my friend spent 300$ on iron pills just to make her hair and nails healthy. Moreover, they are easily available in the drug marts right next to your groceries. People find it easy to ingest a pill rather than spend hours on cooking healthy meal.

This trend needs to be looked upon by government and arrange of public awareness walks and pamphlets. Emphasis need to be put on what a healthy diet can provide us without spending so much money,and hoe easily digestable it is. Secondly,there should be a bann on selling these vitamins without prescription by ones family doctor.For example, in Germany no one buy an iron pill without the advice of doctor.

To conclude,although trend of buying expensive multivitamins is on the rise due to fancy advertisments and easy availability,it can be controlled by proper planing and rules,such as public awarness walks and bannned over the counter sale.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions and maintain a clear position: advertising and convenience encourage purchases, while awareness campaigns and tighter sales rules could promote healthier eating. The example of your friend buying iron pills gives the first point a relevant personal illustration. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others. The benefits of advertising and easy access are explained, but the proposed awareness walks and pamphlets are not explored in detail: explain what information they would provide or how they might change behaviour. The claim about restricting sales also needs qualification, since not all vitamin pills require a prescription. More specific reasoning and a balanced explanation of how diet could be made appealing would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph on reasons, one on solutions, and a conclusion. The progression from advertising and convenience to possible government action is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Secondly,” and “To conclude” help identify the stages of the argument. Some cohesion is nevertheless mechanical, with several points joined through basic sequencing rather than developed links. The opening sentence of the solutions paragraph, “This trend needs to be looked upon by government,” does not clearly connect the proposed campaigns to the earlier causes. Make those links explicit, and use referencing carefully so each pronoun has a clear antecedent. More developed transitions between claims and examples would make the organisation feel more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant vocabulary, including “advertising campaigns,” “public awareness,” “over the counter,” and “hefty amounts,” so the main ideas are communicated. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “ease of ingesting it.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable: “alot,” “advertisments,” “accesibility,” “drug marts,” and “public awarness” reduce accuracy. Some expressions are also awkward, including “banning it to be sold” and “healthy meal.” Aim for standard spelling and more natural collocations, such as “restricting sales without a prescription” and “prepare a healthy meal.” This would make your vocabulary more precise and consistently appropriate to the topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a contrast with “rather than.” The overall meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement recur. For example, “By promoting the public awareness campaigns and banning it to be sold over the counter can provide a solution” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “Emphasis need to be put” should use subject–verb agreement. In “People find it easy to ingest a pill rather than spend hours on cooking healthy meal,” the comparison and article use need correction. Punctuation spacing is also inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences around each main idea, and check agreement, articles, and parallel structures before submitting.

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