Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Now a days, due to lack of nutritional knowledge and busy lifestyles many people believe in quick and convenient solutions to the problems related to the health. Most of healthcare providers suggest, a balanced diet full of essential nutrients can provide vitamins and other minerals required by a body rather than taking supplements to improve deficiencies. However, some other continue spending large amount of money on buying vitamins. Since I believe that it all depends upon nutritional requirements as every individual have their different body needs.

On one hand, working people having limited time to prepare healthy, nutritious meals may prefer quick and convenient solutions. They consider that taking pills are easier than preparing fruits, vegetables and healthy foods. Secondly, due to less nutritional knowledge people do not understand that a balanced diet can provide most essential vitamins. For instance, many individuals are influenced by advertisements being shared in social medias such as many pharmaceutical companies promote supplements by highlighting their health benefits. The same seems with social media influencers and celebrities, they encourage people to purchase different supplements. Thirdly, fear of being vitamin deficient and becoming ill due to lack of essential nutrients most people believe that taking more vitamins automatically makes them healthier.

To overcome these misleading information's, people should be educated about the benefits of balanced diet by arranging public awareness campaigns. Furthermore, educational institutes should teach children about nutrition and healthy eating habits from an early age. Social media campaigns should equally participate in sharing useful information about nutritious and affordable foods. The government initiative should make fresh fruits and vegetable more affordable and healthcare providers including doctors and nutritionist should advice people about healthy eating. In addition, the labelling of food should provide clear nutritional information on food products and demonstrations about making different healthy meals can help people to overcome nutritional deficiencies.

I have an experience of having my family members who had improved their health by eating seasonal fruits, vegetables, eggs and dairy products. I myself give priority of providing homemade and natural nutritional food to my kids and they are much better in their health as compared to others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions and maintain a relevant position: people may choose supplements for convenience, limited nutrition knowledge, advertising, and fear of deficiency, while education and better access to fresh food could encourage dietary change. The examples of social-media promotion and your family’s experience help make the response concrete. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the claim that people take more vitamins because they fear illness could be developed by explaining why pills seem reassuring or why this belief persists despite medical advice. Your suggestions are numerous, but a few—such as food labelling and meal demonstrations—would benefit from a clearer link to changing purchasing behaviour. The response covers the task well, though development is uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining why people buy supplements, a paragraph proposing solutions, and a personal example. Sequencing phrases such as “On one hand,” “Secondly,” and “To overcome” make the progression easy to follow, and the ideas generally remain grouped by purpose. Some linking is mechanical, however, and the list of solutions moves quickly from campaigns to schools, government, healthcare providers, labelling, and demonstrations without showing how these measures connect. The opening position is also somewhat difficult to follow because the final sentence introduces individual nutritional needs without clearly relating this to the reasons discussed. More explicit links between claims and examples, and smoother transitions between proposals, would make cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including phrases such as “nutritional knowledge,” “balanced diet,” “public awareness campaigns,” and “nutritional deficiencies.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and attempts at more specific vocabulary are evident. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, though: “believe in quick and convenient solutions,” “social medias,” “misleading information’s,” and “give priority of providing” do not sound natural in context. There are also spelling or form issues, including “Now a days” and “vegetable” where a plural is needed. These errors do not prevent understanding, but more consistent control of collocation and word forms would make the writing more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex structures, including a relative clause in “a balanced diet … can provide vitamins” and a longer sentence explaining the influence of advertisements. The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “every individual have,” “some other continue,” and “healthcare providers … should advice”; article and number problems in “required by a body” and “taking pills are easier”; and an incomplete or awkwardly connected opening sentence beginning “Since I believe.” Several sentences also need clearer punctuation, particularly the long sentence about fear of deficiency. Aim to check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, while keeping the complex structures you are attempting.

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