Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

While medical professionals agree that a well balanced diet provides all essential nutrients require for healthy person. Nonetheless a significant number of individuals continue to invest substantial amount of money into dietary supplements. This essay shall discuss the underlying reasons for this trend and suggest viable strategies to encourage healthier eating habits.

To initiate, there are numerous reason why people buy vitamin pills and the primary reason is the fast-paced nature of modern life. Owing to this lifestyle pressure individuals have insufficient time to plan, shop for and prepare nutritional meals. To illustrate, most of the people have 9 to 5 work schedule, they donot cook a balanced food daily at home. Consequently, they prefer to take daily supplement to cover up their nutritional need for healthy body and mind Additionally, the supplement

industry utilises powerful marketing campaigns. Through persuasive advertising and social media endorsement, companies convince consumers that present food sources are depleted of vitamins. To exemplify, multivitamin supplement adverts present a healthy and fit individual after consuming vitamins pills because food does not give enough of them. Thus, this trend increase for adverts.

Turning to solutions, Public health authorities should launch comprehensive educational campaigns. For instance, explaining that the body absorbs essential vitamin C far more effectively rather than a tablet. As a result, individuals might be more aware about their food and do not get influenced by social media campaign. Furthermore, government could implement subsides on fresh fruits, whole grains and vegetable, however, taxing heavily processed foods or synthetic supplements. Thes could make

nutritional food more affordable and accessible to people which would incentivise people buy more from supermat dule rather than pharmacy.

To sum up, though modern lifestyle pressure and comparales persuasive advertisement, this could cater by facilitating subsidy on essential food items and educational campaigne

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for supplement use and strategies for improvement. The ideas are relevant, such as the 'fast-paced nature of modern life' and 'marketing campaigns'. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The explanation of solutions is a bit brief, and the conclusion is incomplete and lacks a clear summary of the main points. While the position is clear throughout, the ideas could be extended further to reach a higher band. The response covers all parts of the task well, but the lack of depth in the second half prevents it from reaching the highest level of development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To initiate', 'Consequently', and 'Turning to solutions', although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is generally appropriate, though the final paragraph is fragmented and incomplete. Referencing is mostly clear, but there are instances where the flow is interrupted by grammatical errors or missing words, which slightly affects the overall coherence. The structure is sufficient to follow the argument, but more sophisticated linking would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task. You demonstrate an ability to use topic-specific terms like 'nutritional meals', 'dietary supplements', and 'synthetic supplements'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'supermat dule' (likely a typo for supermarket) and 'comparales persuasive advertisement'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'subsides' instead of 'subsidies' and 'thes' instead of 'these'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider range of precise vocabulary to achieve a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. For example, 'nutrients require for healthy person' should be 'nutrients required for a healthy person', and 'donot' is a spelling error. There are also issues with sentence fragments and missing articles. While you attempt complex structures, the control is inconsistent. The frequency of these errors, particularly in subject-verb agreement and article usage, limits the score. To improve, focus on ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly and that basic grammatical rules are consistently applied.

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