Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

It has always been a matter of debate whether we should use the food or the supplement pills for all necessary vitamins. While doctors says that we could get all essential vitamins from diet but people are still spending a sufficient amount of money on vitamin tablets. In this essay, we will discuss the main reasons associated with this and provide some appropriate solutions to improve diet.

To commence with, people are dependent on vitamin pills because they have insufficient and irregular diet. Most individuals have hectic schedule and they barely have time to cook for themselves. So they are heaviely rely on fast-food and pre cooked meals, such diet often lacks basic nutrient value. Consequently, individuals have deficiency of important minerals and vitamins such as Iron, Zinc, B12 and Omega-3. Therefore, in order to deal with such deficiencies, they start taking vitamin pills because it is easy and convenient way. Moreover, some individuals are professional body builders and it is not possible for them to fullfill their vitamins through diet because they have certain dietry restrictions. Therefore they prefer to consume pills and capsules.

Furthermore, we should encourage and educate people to improve their diet rather than just taking pills because of the absorption and the synergy effect. The vitamin pills have absorption rate of only 30-40% whereas vitamins and minerals from natural resources have much more absorption rate. Similarly, taking balance diet provides the other important macros as well. For instance, oranges have vitamin C but its also provides fiber and gulcose to the body. Additionally, consumimg balance diet is always better and cost-effective method.

To sum up, people are spending a huge amount of money on vitamin pills. Even though doctors are advicing them to consume vitamins from diet. This is because of inappropriate diet and professional reasons.We should aware indiviuals about the natural benefits of consuming a good diet such as absorption and addtional macros.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for vitamin supplement use and methods to encourage dietary improvements. The ideas are relevant, such as the mention of hectic lifestyles and the specific needs of bodybuilders. However, the development of the second part of the prompt—how to persuade people—is somewhat limited. While you mention education and the benefits of natural absorption, the argument could be strengthened by suggesting specific campaigns or government policies. The position is clear throughout, and the response covers all requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main points. Cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Consequently', and 'Furthermore' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as the abrupt start to the final paragraph. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the structure supports the reader's understanding of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the topic, including terms like 'deficiency', 'synergy effect', and 'cost-effective'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'heaviely' (heavily), 'fullfill' (fulfill), 'dietry' (dietary), and 'gulcose' (glucose). Additionally, 'advicing' should be 'advising'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading. The vocabulary is generally appropriate for the task, but more precise collocations would elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('doctors says') and incorrect verb forms ('we will discuss... and provide', 'we should aware indiviuals'). Some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'it is not possible for them to fullfill their vitamins'. While the meaning is always clear and communication is not impeded, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage will improve your accuracy.

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