Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

It has always been a matter of debate whether we should use the food or the supplement pills for all necessary vitamins. While doctors say that we could get all essential vitamins from diet, people are still spending a sufficient amount of money on vitamin tablets. In this essay, we will discuss the main reasons associated with this and provide some appropriate solutions to improve diet.

To commence with, people are dependent on vitamin pills because they have insufficient and irregular diet. Most individuals have a hectic schedule and they barely have time to cook for themselves. So they heaviely rely on fast-food and pre-cooked meals, such a diet often lacks basic nutritional value. Consequently, individuals have a deficiency of important minerals and vitamins such as Iron, Zinc, B12 and Omega-3. Therefore, in order to deal with such deficiencies, they start taking vitamin pills because it is an easy and convenient way. Moreover, some individuals are professional body builders and it is not possible for them to fullfill their vitamins through diet because they have certain dietary restrictions. Therefore they prefer to consume pills and capsules.

Furthermore, the government should run an awareness campiagns to educate people regarding improving their diet rather than just taking pills. This can be done those adverts and local camps. In these programs issues like absorption rate and the synergy effect could be described to local population. Likewise, the vitamin pills have an absorption rate of only 30-40% whereas vitamins and minerals from the natural resources have much a higher absorption rate. Similarly, taking balance diet provides the other important macros as well. For instance, oranges have vitamin C but its also provides fiber and glucose to the body. Additionally, consuming a balanced diet is always better and a cost-effective method.

To sum up, people are spending a huge amount of money on vitamin pills. Even though doctors are advising them to consume vitamins from the balanced diet. This is because of inappropriate diet and professional reasons. The government should aware individuals about the natural benefits of consuming a good diet such as absorption and additional macros.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, providing clear reasons for the popularity of vitamin pills (hectic lifestyles and specific dietary needs) and suggesting relevant solutions (government awareness campaigns and education on absorption rates). The ideas are well-developed and supported with examples, such as the comparison between oranges and supplements. The position is clear throughout the essay. To reach a higher band, the student could further elaborate on the 'synergy effect' mentioned, as it remains slightly vague. Overall, the response is well-focused and fully satisfies the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used effectively to link ideas, such as 'To commence with,' 'Consequently,' and 'Furthermore.' Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the reasons from the solutions. However, there are minor issues with referencing and flow, such as the slightly awkward phrasing 'This can be done those adverts,' which impacts the smoothness of the transition. Despite these minor mechanical errors, the progression of ideas remains clear and easy to follow throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the topic with some precision, using terms like 'nutritional value,' 'deficiency,' 'absorption rate,' and 'synergy effect.' There are some spelling errors, such as 'heaviely' instead of 'heavily' and 'campiagns' instead of 'campaigns,' as well as minor collocation issues like 'fullfill their vitamins.' While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and more natural collocations to demonstrate a higher level of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There is a good attempt at using complex sentences, though some contain grammatical slips, such as 'its also provides' (should be 'it also provides') and 'taking balance diet' (should be 'a balanced diet'). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are occasional errors in sentence boundaries. The majority of the content is clear, and the grammatical errors do not cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the student should aim for more consistent accuracy in complex structures and articles.

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