Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is very important to have balanced diet. Many health experts quoted that all kinds of vitamins and minerals can be obtained without getting additional supplements if we take care of food we are having still people buy extra supplementaries due to food availability, and diet restrictions.

People might have various reasons to spend their money on vitamin pills. One of them is diet restrictions. There is a fraction of population, which is vegetarian. That means the amount of vitamins like B12 and vitamin D3 are limited in fruits and vegetables. Additionally, the availability of all kinds of fruits that can provide a certain type of nutrient unlimited locally people need to spend on exotic products which are expensive. For example, research shows that majority of vegetarian individuals have signs of weak bones. By late 40s they are compelled to take medicines to strengthen it.

Although people who are unable to maintain a healthy diet can improve their food consumption and reduce buying vitamin pills by taking following steps. Firstly reduce eating out from restaurants and having junk food. Those food contain high level of carbohydrates that makes our gut heavy and our body refuses to take other essential nutrients. Secondly, substitute your ingredients in your meal with more vitamin and protein rich items for instance, you can substitute your chocolate craving with dates which are rich in iron. We can add chickpea floor when we make a bread that has more protein lastly track your food consumption so you are aware about amount of protein and minerals. Your body is collecting and using it can easily be done by using mobile applications available nowadays.

To conclude people are buying vitamin pills to fulfilled their body needs, but few Everyday habits can enable them to help their body and less supplements.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, exploring why people spend money on vitamin pills—such as diet restrictions like vegetarianism and the high cost of local exotic produce—and suggesting ways people can improve their diet instead, such as reducing junk food and substituting ingredients. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and lacks depth in places, such as the underdeveloped argument regarding weak bones. The conclusion is also quite brief and slightly garbled in expression. Overall, the response meets the criteria for Band 6 by addressing all parts of the task with relevant, though occasionally under-developed, ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts logical paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes interrupted by awkward transitions and mechanical cohesive devices. For example, the sentence structure in the third paragraph uses abrupt transitions like 'Firstly reduce eating out' and 'lastly track your food consumption' which lack smooth integration. Referencing and pronoun use are occasionally unclear, as seen in the phrase 'takes our food consumption and reduce buying vitamin pills by taking following steps'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires better linking to reach a higher band. This corresponds to Band 6 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'diet restrictions', 'exotic products', and 'mobile applications'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'supplementaries' instead of 'supplements', 'chickpea floor' instead of 'flour', and 'fulfilled their body needs' instead of 'fulfill'. Spelling and word-formation errors occur (e.g., 'Everyday' used as a noun modifier for 'habits' where 'daily' is better), but they do not seriously impede overall communication. These features fit the Band 6 descriptor well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over structure. However, there are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text. Examples include missing articles ('have balanced diet'), subject-verb agreement issues ('Those food contain'), run-on constructions, and awkward phrasing ('By late 40s they are compelled to take medicines to strengthen it'). Punctuation is also weak in places, particularly with run-on sentences in the third paragraph. While these errors do not completely obscure the meaning, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a Band 6.5 or 7, placing it firmly at Band 5.5.

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