Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A significant number of people believe in spending considerable amount of money in purchasing multivitamins, ignoring the advice of health care specialists to consume a healthy diet. This trend has increased in recent years. There could be multiple factors encouraging an individual to relay on pills in order to overcome vitamins deficiencies. Firstly, everyone want quick results and secondly, people hardly trust food which they consume today.

Today everyone is impatient and want to have result in fast track mode. This is the reason most of the individuals with vitamin defeciency, opts for tablets. Tablets give positive output within a few days of consumption. Let us consider example of a person who is Vitamin D deficinet. We all are aware that Sun is the major source of Vitamin D. Therefore, many medical practioniar recommends people with Vitamin D shortage to spend minimum 20 to 30 minutes under direct sunlight of early hours. But, this entire process will take months and months of dedication to get back the level of Vitamin D at normal range, hence rather than following this religiously they prefer to take Vitamin D shots weekly, which increases Vitamin D level to required range within few weeks. Same goes with Vitamin A, where doctor recommendes to consume green and leafy seasonal vegetables, but everyone is so impatient that they prefer to depend on pills rather than opting for green vegetables in their diet.

In addition to this, other main reason of depending on medicines is that today food we consume is mostly contaminated. This contamination is done by humans in order to gain profits. For example, uncontrolled use of fertilisers in crops to increase their productivity, results in entry of fertilisers in our food which we consume. Also, fruits are today vaccinated to make them ripe and enlarged in size. The chemicals used for this purpose also enter the human food-chain resulting in diseases of one and another kind. Therefore, people hardly trust their foods which they consume, and hence, there is no chance that these consumable food can help in improving the overall health of an individual. Thus, they relay more on medicines for improving their health rather than food they consume.

Having said all, still consumption of food should be a major source of improving our over all health. Though, most of the foods which we eat are contaminated in one or another way, but still there are ways where people can get healthy diet. For example, they should only buy seasonal fruits and vegetables. This will ensure that none of them are vaccinated and are grown naturally. Moreover, if possible one should try to consume organic foods, this will eliminate the usage of chemicals and fertilisers, and hence, a healthy byproduct is received.

At the end, it is not wrong to say that by keeping track of what a person is eating, they can drastically reduced the consumption of pills, rather they can have healthy food consumption for healthy leaving.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by explaining why people spend large sums of money on vitamin pills—citing the desire for quick results and distrust of contaminated food—and suggests ways people can be persuaded to improve their diet, such as buying seasonal produce and organic foods. A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. However, some ideas tend to over-generalise, such as claiming that fruits are 'vaccinated' or that no consumable food can otherwise help health without organic intervention. Despite these minor generalisations, the main parts of the task are well-developed and supported with relevant examples like Vitamin D and Vitamin A.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing the prompt's two main questions, a counter-perspective on diet improvement, and a concluding remark. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'In addition to this', and 'Therefore' are employed to guide the reader through the argument. While the logical progression is generally clear, some referencing and transitional links feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, such as 'Today everyone is impatient' followed immediately by 'everyone is so impatient'. Overall, the text maintains a coherent structure throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate to sufficient range of vocabulary suitable for the task, attempting less common items such as 'multivitamins', 'deficiencies', 'contaminated', and 'byproduct'. However, there are noticeable word-choice inaccuracies and unnatural collocations throughout the text. For instance, writing 'considerable amount' instead of 'a considerable amount', 'relay on' instead of 'rely on', and 'fruits are today vaccinated' rather than treated or sprayed. Spelling and morphological slips also occur, such as 'defeciency' and 'practioniar'. These do not impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating conditional structures and relative clauses. There are, however, frequent grammatical errors, particularly involving verb forms, article usage, and singular/plural agreement. Examples include 'everyone want quick results' (subject-verb agreement), 'want to have result in fast track mode' (missing article), and 'drastically reduced' instead of 'drastically reduce'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while errors are noticeable, they rarely impede communication, allowing the reader to follow the arguments without serious strain.

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