Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

For our daily healthy life some doctors recommend that we used to have proper mentanance of vitamins in our body. However, some individuals spend their money to buy a vitamin pills. doctors suggest us to boost vitamin need by following healthy diet. There are some reasons why people spend a lot money on vitamin pills, in the upcoming paragraph i shall explain and give reasons of how could it will be improved.

Firstly, there are some reason behind why people consume vitamin pills and a portion of money on that. The biggest one is due to unavaibility. Contries like Canada, Uk, Autralia have lonh winter season and due to that reason the absence of sun is actual problem. on a wintery days it is difficult for natives to do outdoor activities or going somewhere else. so the people reside in these countries think of the alternative way which is taking pills like Vitamin D pills to fulfill there needs as they do not have any other choice.

Ulternatively,there are some ways related to where individuals can be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills. for instance, people can meet the diatician and follow a regular strict diet which help them to improve vitamin deficiency by healthy diet not just by taking vitamin pills. Secondly, due to rapid growth of internet, one can find ways and do reseach on internet and increase knowledge acoording to that particular topic. even these days chat GPT or Google Amini helps us in this matter, you just have to tell them what you want.

In conclusion, reasons like due to unavaibility people depends on vitamin pills other than that there are some ways that how people improve their lifestyle just by attending a dietician and not spend a large sums of money on buying pills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons why people spend money on vitamin pills (such as lack of sunlight in countries like Canada and the UK) and suggesting how people could be persuaded to improve their diet (consulting a dietician or using internet research/AI tools). A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and lack deep extension or detailed supporting examples, keeping the response within the Band 6 level. For instance, the explanation regarding weather and vitamin D is relevant, but it remains brief and superficial. Similarly, the suggestions for persuasion are stated generally without robust elaboration. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to expand on their ideas with more fully developed explanations and concrete real-world examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is utilized, though the structural flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical transitions and informal phrasing, such as 'in the upcoming paragraph i shall explain'. Cohesive devices are used, but some are repetitive or applied awkwardly, for instance, starting multiple sentences with 'due to' or 'there are some'. Referencing is generally clear, but sentence-to-sentence progression can feel disjointed at times. To improve coherence, the writer should employ a wider and more natural range of cohesive ties and ensure that paragraph transitions guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next without relying on formulaic expressions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic ideas about diet and vitamins. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'deficiency', 'unavailability', and 'dietician', but these are accompanied by noticeable spelling and word choice errors, including 'mentanance', 'unavaibility', 'Contries', 'Autralia', 'lonh', 'wintery', 'diatician', 'reseach', and 'acoording'. Furthermore, capitalization is frequently neglected at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns. While these errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the lexical score from reaching a higher band. A wider control of accurate word formation and collocation is required for Band 6.5 or above.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some capability to construct multi-clause sentences, such as 'so the people reside in these countries think of the alternative way which is taking pills like Vitamin D pills to fulfill there needs'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in verb forms ('we used to have', 'how could it will be improved'), subject-verb agreement, preposition usage, and pronouns ('fulfill there needs'). Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with run-on sentences and missing capitalization. Because errors occur frequently throughout the response and occasionally cause slight strain for the reader, the grammar performance aligns best with Band 5.0.

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