Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.
Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?
How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is commonly seen that most of physician gave advice to take vitamins as a form of take healthy diet. However, rest of individuals spent large amount of money to buy vitamin tablets. In this essay, I will describe the reasons behind spending huge money on vitamin pills as well as which steps are helpful for them towards take healthy diet as compared to purchase vitamin pills that would be explain in upcoming paragraphs.
There are numerous reasons why people spend more money to buy vitamins pills. First and foremost is that burden of work. To explain it more, nowadys individuals do lot of work for long hours and they feel pressure of their work. As a result, their body feel too tiredness and weakness. Therefore, they take vitamin tablets to overcome their weakness and feel energy in their body to do upcoming task in their lives. For instance, a recent survey conducted by newspaper that approximately 70% vitamin pills are used by people for getting enery in their body. Hence, the demand of these pills are increasing tn these days. Moreover, vitamin pills do work fast instead of taking healthy diet so that.s why people want to get fast result of recovery their body.
On the other side, some ways which are heplful for improving diet of individuals. First of all, government should organise seminars related to healthy diet which are not only give the knowlege about which vegetables, cereals, fruits and other things are full of vitamins but also tell about how much quantity take to each person. While, the adverse impact of taking more quantity of vitamins pills on health. In addition, social media also effective way to aware people about healthy diet by using different tyes of the websites and apps as people use more social media and they can easily adpot information which they take through social media. For example, majority of people take healthy diet with the assist of social media.
Conclusion, although vitamins pills have most important to recover energy in individuals lives but healthy diet is most necessary for them without any infections which mostly spread from vitamins pills. Apart from this camps and social media are also significant for people towards healthy diet.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by explaining why people spend money on vitamin pills and suggesting ways to persuade them to improve their diet. A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. The ideas are relevant, such as work pressure, fatigue, government seminars, and social media campaigns. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed or repetitive, such as the explanation of why people want fast results and how social media works. Examples are provided, such as a survey statistic and general references to social media usage, which support the arguments adequately. Overall, the task is successfully fulfilled, aligning with a Band 6.0 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is divided into logical paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each part of the prompt, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'First and foremost', 'Moreover', and 'On the other side'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt or awkward, such as starting the conclusion with 'Conclusion, although...'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the text, but the internal flow of sentences can be disjointed. This level of organisation and cohesion corresponds to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the task, including words like 'individuals', 'seminars', and 'significant'. However, there are numerous word choice and word formation errors throughout the text, such as 'physician gave advice', 'take healthy diet', 'spent large amount of money' (instead of a large amount), 'vitamins pills', and 'knowlege'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with noticeable inaccuracy, and spelling errors like 'nowadys', 'enery', 'heplful', and 'adpot' occur. Because the vocabulary is adequate for the task but contains frequent errors that occasionally strain the reader, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional or multi-clause structures ('While, the adverse impact of taking more quantity...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding verb forms, article usage, preposition selection, and sentence fragments. Examples include 'most of physician gave advice to take vitamins as a form of take healthy diet', 'their body feel too tiredness and weakness', and sentences that lack main verbs or subjects. These errors frequently impede smooth reading, though meaning can generally be discerned. This performance fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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