Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

quick and easy effects

consequences on health

lazy to focus on health '

''Health is wealth", There are various doctors who inform the community that we should to take balance-diet instead of spending funds on buying supplementary medicines such as vitamins pills etc. In my perspective, taking a whole nutritious value in a plate is the remedy of all the diseases.

Taking a pill instead of taking a healthy diet is a short-cut and a convient option for all the adults. Moreover, There are numerous effects of those pills on one's body and health. Howerver, it is totally unacceptable that they are neglecting their body needs on the hectic schedule. There is an eminent personality ms. Richa chadha, a famous bollywood actor, who always used to take supplements to balance her calcium, vitamins, iron and zinc. Instaed of taking real and fresh food for food. which has an adverse impact on her health and it ended up having kidney and liver damage.

Awareness, this is most suitable and reliable solution for this problem. to spread more and more knowdege to society about its adverse impact on health. According to a recent survey, the fastest mode of promting anything is through school books, newchannels and social networking sites. This is an alraming sitatutaion and amerloration on taking healthy diet is paramount role for the countries future needs.

In conclusion to this essay, people are spending alot of money to stay temporary fit, although it cannot last longer. citezens need to shift the trend towards healthy diet for better future generation and countries betterment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons why people spend money on vitamin pills, such as convenience and the desire for quick effects, and suggesting ways people could be persuaded to improve their diet, including through school books, news channels, and social media. The writer takes a clear position that a balanced whole-food diet is superior and that supplements can be harmful, citing a personal example regarding a Bollywood actor. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and includes disjointed fragments at the very beginning of the response. The supporting example is slightly confused in expression. Nevertheless, all parts of the task are addressed with relevant, albeit somewhat brief, ideas, placing this performance at Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, dividing the introduction, body paragraphs addressing the two prompt questions, and the conclusion. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty. The transition from the disjointed bullet-point notes at the start into the formal essay text is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen with ambiguous pronouns and phrases like 'its adverse impact'. Paragraphing is utilized sufficiently to separate distinct ideas, but internal logical progression within paragraphs is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and abrupt shifts. This corresponds to a Band 5.5 performance, rounded to a stable Band 6.0 based on overall structural organization.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'supplementary medicines', 'nutritious value', 'amenioration', and 'paramount role'. However, there are frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'we should to take balance-diet', 'convient option', 'body needs on the hectic schedule', and 'promting anything'. Spelling errors also appear, including 'convient', 'knowdege', 'alraming', 'sitatutaion', 'amerloration', 'alot', and 'citezens'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over structure. However, grammatical inaccuracies are frequent throughout the response. Examples of errors include 'we should to take balance-diet', 'taking a whole nutritious value in a plate is the remedy of all the diseases', 'It ended up having kidney and liver damage', and 'amerloration on taking healthy diet is paramount role'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent, such as commas separating independent clauses improperly or missing articles before singular countable nouns. Because errors frequently occur and can cause some difficulty for the reader, this warrants a Band 5.0.

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