Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world, balancing diet plays crucial role for humans life to stay fit and fine. Also, with complete diet people can live longer and can stay far away from many diseases rather than taking a medicines of vitamins. due to busy lifestyle, people don't have focus on their diet, so they are taking pills to complete their vitamins.

first of all. there are numerous ways people spend a lot of income to take vitamins pills. nowadays, people are busy in their heactic scheule to copmlete their work, basic needs . so they don't have an enough time to make food at home, they usually love to eat food from restaurant, food trucks. So, they eat an unhealty oily food, which cause some diseases as well as low their vitamin level from their body. Moreover, people dont like to green vegetables, if they make food at home . They just like to use pre made food which people can buy from local grocery shops, which also reduce the levels of vitamins.

however, if people make food at home with proper way and according to their choices like proper green vegetable and eat less oil, it will definitely put positive affect on their daily lifestyle. Due to heactic schedule , they don't have an enough time to make food , they can prepare weekly homemade food at home, which will be very easy for them to make in less time. Also, they can stay fit with proper diet rather than taking a different pills of vitamins.

To conclude, if people want to stay healthy in their lifestyle, they have to equally manage their time with proper manner. so, they can prepare their weekly diet for taking good source of vitamins.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, exploring why people spend money on vitamin pills due to busy lifestyles and suggesting homemade weekly meal preparation as a solution. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. While the writer attempts to explain the causes behind pill consumption and how to encourage better diets, the explanations lack depth and specific examples from personal knowledge or experience, which is required for a complete band 7 development. The position is clear throughout, but the reasoning remains basic, with general statements such as people eating 'unhealthy oily food' rather than fully expanded arguments. Therefore, the task achievement aligns best with band 6, as all parts are addressed with relevant ideas, but some are under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is arranged into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which shows basic paragraphing structure. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesion. For example, sentences often start abruptly, such as 'first of all. there are numerous ways...' with capitalization and punctuation errors that hinder the flow. Transitional markers are sometimes used inappropriately or redundantly, such as starting consecutive sentences with 'due to' or 'also'. Referencing is not always clear, and the overall coherence suffers from a lack of smooth transitions between ideas. Consequently, the organization reflects band 5, where there is some structure, but cohesive devices are inadequate and repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'balancing diet plays crucial role', 'taking a medicines of vitamins', 'heactic scheule', and 'positive affect'. While the writer attempts less common phrases like 'hectic schedule' or 'daily lifestyle', these are marred by spelling and grammatical collocation errors ('heactic', 'pre made food'). The range is minimally adequate for the task, meaning the writer can communicate basic concepts, but the frequent lexical inaccuracies and poor word forms pull the score down to band 5, as they occasionally cause difficulty or hesitation for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty, containing persistent errors in articles, prepositions, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Examples of errors include 'humans life', 'taking a medicines of vitamins', 'dont have an enough time', and sentences beginning with lowercase letters following periods. Punctuation is particularly weak, with erratic capitalisation and spaced periods. Because the majority of sentences contain errors and there is a lack of control over complex forms, the grammar aligns with band 4, as errors are frequent and occasionally strain the reader's understanding.

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