Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is incontovertable that spend large amount of money on vitamin pills may put deep impact on this modern society . In this this discource, i will explicate that why this is happening with valid reasons such as instant take energy , lack of time and also , how people could be ifluenced for taking healthy diet reather than takeing vitamin pills .

It is usally claimed that large amount of money spend on vitamin pills . It is proved by instant taking and convienent way to get vitamins . By the way of explaination , vitamin pills give vitamins to body in very fast way as compare to vitamin completed diet . Not only it is easy way for taking vitamins but there is not need to carry tiffen boxes . Another reason is lack of time . To prove it with an perfect instance is that , one of my friend is very busy in their household chors and with their job , he preffer to take vitamin pills that completed his body demand .

At the same time it is also an argument that how users of vitamin pills moved to healthy diet . To begin with , with the help of dietecian , people can improve their diet . people should to avoid junk food and gain fruits and vegetable . Schools and colleges should impose an permanent subject on healthy diet in all modules . Another way is motivate to people . For example , as a survey that was done in year 2016 by health department of UK , found that almost 70% of indviduals health was improved after focusing on healty diet .

To conclude , although, there various reasons for spending more money in vitams pills but people can be get out from this hebit with help of motivation and advice of good dietician .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task by exploring reasons why people spend money on vitamin pills and suggesting methods to encourage a healthy diet instead. The student presents a clear position and supports ideas with explanations and examples, such as mentioning convenience, lack of time, and referencing a UK health department survey. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed and lack depth. For instance, the discussion on why people purchase pills could be more thoroughly explored beyond basic convenience. Furthermore, minor over-generalizations occur in the supporting details. Nonetheless, all prompt requirements are covered, which aligns well with the descriptors for Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged into four paragraphs representing a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each prompt part, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used throughout, such as 'To begin with', 'At the same time', and 'To conclude', although some are applied somewhat mechanically. Paragraphing is generally appropriate, separating the main ideas logically. However, referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward transitions and dense phrasing. The progression of ideas is discernible, fitting the Band 6 descriptor where the arrangement is coherent overall despite some faulty or mechanical cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, including terms like 'discourse', 'explicate', 'dietician', and 'individuals'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'incontovertable' instead of 'incontrovertible', 'tiffen' instead of 'tiffin', 'chors' instead of 'chores', and 'hebit' instead of 'habit'. Word choice and collocations are occasionally unnatural, for example 'instant take energy' and 'gain fruits and vegetable'. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0, as the noticeable spelling and word choice errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety in structure. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, featuring frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and word forms. Examples include 'spend large amount of money' instead of 'spending a large amount', 'how people could be ifluenced for taking' instead of 'influenced to take', and 'people should to avoid' instead of 'people should avoid'. Punctuation errors, such as unnecessary spaces before commas, are also persistent. While the meaning remains mostly clear despite the errors, the high frequency of inaccurate complex structures places this performance firmly at Band 5.0.

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