Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.
Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?
How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Doctors give the statement that healthy food can give all the vital nutritions which we need in our daily life ,while few individuals take huge amount of tablets form the market for complete their vitamins. This essay will discuss why i believe , people spend money on pills because of their sechadule and how they can overcome this habit by improving their meals .
To begain with, people eat vitamin pills because they are busy. Thesedays , all the individulas have a lot of work that is way they are busy in their daily sechadule and they do not have a enhough time to prepare 3 meal and eat it . Thus, they purchase some vitamin tablets which are required for our body . For instance, in Canada , there are number of floks who do double shifts ,hence, they get the nutrition pills form the market instead of preparing their meals brcause of the time,
On the other hand , there are numrous ways to improve the diet rather than buying medicines such as fixing sechaduleof their food and exercise.If people can fix their routine according to their meals and do some basic workout ,then ,they can over come the eating habit of capsuls . Moreover , they can also eat fruits which can help to fullfil all the vitamins requriments.To illustrate this, A headline of the USA news shows that people avoid to eat the pills when they just fix their eating habits and add some fruits as well as exercise in their daily routine.
In conclusion, Although, people spend money on nutrition pills becauses they do not have enough time for preparing meals, yet they can improve their diet and overcome the habit of purchasing the tablets by just fixing their routine according to their diet plan and also add fruits as well as do some exercies in their routine.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt directly: it discusses why people spend money on vitamin pills due to busy schedules, and it suggests ways people can improve their diet, such as fixing meal routines, exercising, and eating fruits. The position is clear throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas tends to be slightly repetitive and somewhat general. For instance, the example about Canada and the reference to a USA news headline lack specific supporting depth, placing the response solidly in Band 6. The main parts of the task are covered with relevant ideas, though the support for these ideas remains partially under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay demonstrates a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different parts of the prompt. Cohesive devices are employed, such as "To begain with", "On the other hand", and "In conclusion", but referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical. There are noticeable punctuation and spacing errors around commas and periods, and transitional phrases are occasionally awkward. Overall arrangement is coherent, earning a Band 6.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as "nutrition", "overcome", and "capsuls". However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including "nutritions" instead of "nutrition", "sechadule" instead of "schedule", "begain" instead of "begin", "enhough" instead of "enough", "floks" instead of "folks", and "requriments" instead of "requirements". These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional clauses ("If people can fix their routine...") and concessive clauses ("Although, people spend money..."). However, there are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors, including incorrect verb forms ("avoid to eat"), misuse of articles, and awkward phrasing ("is way they are busy"). Punctuation is particularly weak, with spaces preceding commas and periods. These errors occur regularly throughout the response, though communication is generally maintained, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
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