Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the contemporary era, people are highly conscious about their health in comparison to the old times. For a same purpose, they prefer to maintain a good score of vitamins, minerals and nutrients in their bodies whether through healthy eating or by taking supplements. As per Doctor's, the deficiency of all the vitamins could be rectified by having the vitamin rich diet. While the patients are eagerly spending a lot of their money on vitamin pills, this attitude should replaced by bringing effective changes in a diet.

Primarily, if reports concluded that a person is having a Vitamin A deficiency, the improvements could be observed by adding a diary products such as milk, butter and curd. Similarly, a Vitamin D deficiency person should engage a habit to sit in sunlight instead of taking a pill. The lack of knowledge about the vitamins and how one can rectify their imbalance is utmost reason behind taking medicine. Additionally, opting a easiest approach is an attribute of some people's personality who have a little or no time to sit down and search for alternative options in place of prescribed medications.

Undoubtedly, in urban areas the working professionals always look forward for ready to eat food which they can store in their freezers. By consuming frozen food, they are saving their time to cook food, however they are deteriorating their health. Specifically, one should thoroughly administer what actually they are consuming from in a whole day and discuss same with their doctor to know what should be replaced and with what. Furthermore, seeking help from internet is viable choice by asking search engine what could be done at home initially to overcome from any specific vitamin deficiency. Over and above, one should seek help from a dietician who could make a daily food routine and following strictly the recommended eating pattern one could see the desire results in reports.

Overall, taking out a time from daily routine is first step and navigating a way to approcah a right person to implements changes in a diet is person's own responsibility.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both why people spend money on vitamin pills and how they could be persuaded to improve their diet. The position is generally clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is uneven. While the first body paragraph provides some clear reasons for pill consumption—such as a lack of knowledge and opting for the easiest approach—the second body paragraph touches on multiple ideas like frozen food, doctors' advice, internet searches, and dieticians without fully exploring any single solution in depth. This mix of under-developed and well-covered points places the task response in the middle tier, fulfilling the requirements for the lower band while showing glimpses of fully extended arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the response into introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is utilised, separating the causes from the solutions, although the third paragraph is quite dense and tackles several separate ideas. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'Primarily', 'Similarly', and 'Undoubtedly', but their usage can occasionally feel mechanical or forced, as seen with 'Over and above'. Referencing is generally understandable, but transitions between sentences occasionally lack smooth progression, resulting in a slightly disjointed flow that prevents the writing from achieving a higher level of logical organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common phrases such as 'contemporary era', 'working professionals', and 'dietician'. However, there are noticeable limitations and inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word formation. Examples include 'diary products' instead of 'dairy products', 'a Vitamin D deficiency person' instead of 'a person with a Vitamin D deficiency', 'optin a easiest approach', and 'desire results' instead of 'desired results'. While these lexical errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough and restrict the vocabulary to a limited, minimally adequate range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to use varied structures. However, there are persistent errors in grammar, articles, and prepositions throughout the text. Examples include 'For a same purpose', 'As per Doctor's', 'this attitude should replaced by', 'adding a diary products', 'engage a habit', 'opting a easiest approach', and 'taking out a time'. Punctuation and article usage are also flawed in places, such as 'from in a whole day'. These errors require some effort to decode, though they rarely impede overall communication, placing the grammatical control firmly in the mid-range.

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