Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are bunch of items are available in the diet to get the vitamins but a major percentage of the population throughout the world consumes the vitamins capsules to find the ease in the living life style and least botherd about the expenses. However, these vitamins proved healthy by the survey conducted by the best selling newyork times newspaper. Consuming vitamins bills are harmless.

In my point of view, All human bodies doesn't cope up with the produce items and have specific allergies with the certain the dairy items or any items which are allergetic in nature rather they invest in buying the vitamins tablets. For example two of my family members are allergic to milk they instead bought vitamin C pills inorder to ensure the healty diet.

There are several ways to encourage population to improve diet habits, such as consuming leafy vegetables, citrus fruits and dairy products. Promotion should be done in the advertisments, banners should be displayed the in the grocery stores showing the benefits of having these healthy items. Companies should come up new ideas to attract the major audience showing the right way to cook the vegetables or meat to avoid the allergies caused.

Example: A restaurant has a Pan Seared Shrimp and usualy cooks by using a flavoured mayo, if a customer has alllergy with the dairy product, Restaurant's cook make sure to use different type the sauce called tomato base salsa which has no dairy ingredient in the way a customer was satisfied and experieced the same dish of their favourite.

In the conclusion, my opinion is have to healty diet by making food with different methods rather than following the traditional methods as explained in the example. I also enrourage most of the people should prefer the healty diet by cooking food at home by using following unique ideas and make ideal budget to spend the vitamin capsules.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that allergies may lead people to buy supplements, and you propose advertising, store displays and cooking alternatives to encourage healthier eating. The family example gives the first point some personal support. However, the explanation of why people spend large sums is narrow: the opening mentions convenience but does not explain it, and the claim that supplements are harmless is not developed or clearly connected to the question. The suggestions for improving diets are relevant, but the restaurant example takes considerable space without clearly showing how it would persuade people generally. Your position is present, especially in the conclusion, but the ideas remain limited and need clearer explanation and support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for the reasons, proposed solutions and conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use basic signposting such as “For example” and “In the conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the opening moves from convenience to a newspaper survey and then to the claim that supplements are harmless without explaining the links. Some connections are awkward or repetitive, and the long restaurant example interrupts the development of the general solution. The conclusion repeats the preference for a healthy diet but introduces the unclear idea of making an “ideal budget” for capsules. Use topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “vitamin capsules,” “allergies,” “leafy vegetables,” and “dairy products,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “Pan Seared Shrimp” and “tomato base salsa.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts difficult to understand, including “find the ease in the living life style,” “vitamins bills,” and “ideal budget to spend the vitamin capsules.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “botherd,” “allergetic,” and “advertisments” are noticeable. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling; for example, explain that people choose supplements for convenience or because they believe them to be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional example about a customer with a dairy allergy. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “There are bunch of items are available” combines incompatible sentence patterns, while “All human bodies doesn't cope up” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “a major percentage … consumes” and “Restaurant's cook make sure.” Some sentences lack clear grammatical links between clauses. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation.

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