Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

While health professional recommend people to rely on balanced and nutritional diet to stay healthy but nowadays most of the individual get dependent on vitamins supplement due to psychological factors and modern lifestyle pressure. Global market of these pills continues to thrive. But making suitable strategies can help people to focus more on natural sources of food.

In present era, due to heavy work pressure and advance lifestyle people do not get enough time to focus on various health issues and eating habits. Consumers primarily purchase vitamin supplement for convenience and psychological reassurance to fulfill the nutritional gaps. Furthermore, aggressive marketing strategies of many pharmaceuticals and healthcare companies convincing individuals that everyday fatigue and stress can be easily solved with synthetic pills. For instance, people avoid making nutritional rich food instead of that prefer to take supplements which can be an easy and quick option.

On the other hand, to shift public priority from synthetic pills to wholesome food, government should take some measurable action towards it. Education and accessibility must be addressed simultaneously. Firstly, Authority and health organization should implement clear and engaging campaign which shows the benefits and importance of nutritional healthy diet. For example, explaining that the Vitamin C can be naturally get by consuming oranges which is more safe and effective, full of anti-oxidant and fiber. Secondly, making fruits and vegetables more affordable and accessible so that it can be easily purchase by every people. Finally, practical life-skills training, like cooking workshops in schools community center, can empower public to prepare nutritional meals efficiently.

To sum up, while convenience and aggressive marketing captures human mind psychologically but through education and awareness campaign and practical culinary skills, government can educate society about the importance of healthy and nutritional food which prioritize their diet over supplements.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions and maintain a clear overall position: convenience, reassurance and marketing help explain supplement use, while education, affordability and cooking skills are proposed as alternatives. These are relevant, practical ideas, and the examples of oranges and school cooking workshops make the response more specific. The explanation of why people buy pills is somewhat more developed than the proposed solutions, which are mainly listed rather than explored—for example, you could explain how campaigns might correct misleading claims or how better access would change daily choices. The claim that supplements are “more safe and effective” is also too broad and would benefit from qualification. More balanced development and support for each main point would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining supplement use, a paragraph proposing solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” help readers identify the stages of your argument. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated list markers in the solutions paragraph, and the opening sentence’s “While … but” construction makes the relationship between ideas unclear. A few references are also imprecise, such as “it” in the sentence about making fruits and vegetables affordable. Use transitions that show the specific relationship between ideas and make pronoun references explicit to create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “psychological reassurance,” “aggressive marketing strategies,” “nutritional gaps,” and “practical life-skills training.” These choices show an effort to express ideas beyond basic vocabulary, and the meaning is generally clear. Some less common expressions are not used naturally or precisely: “advance lifestyle pressure,” “nutritional rich food,” and “captures human mind psychologically” are awkward, while “pharmaceuticals” does not fit naturally as a label for companies here. There are also word-form and spelling slips, including “health professional” and “anti-oxidant.” Aim for accurate collocations and forms, and prefer clear, natural phrasing over complex wording when unsure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including clauses introduced by “while,” “which,” and “so that,” and most of your meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, however. The opening has a faulty contrast structure (“While … but”), and subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “companies convincing” and “marketing captures.” Other examples include “the Vitamin C can be naturally get” and “it can be easily purchase,” where the verb forms are not correctly constructed. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “Authority and health organization.” Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, and review articles and agreement; this would make your varied sentence structures more controlled.

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