Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Yes The doctor is asking very good you can get fit by taking complete vitamins vitamins are essential for body that keeps body fit and healthy As we see our daily life routine we are not taking heathy meal

we are eating junk food which contain lots of calories

which make fat in our body then further disease ocur like stomach issu upset of stomach inproper digestion burn continuous constipation at other had i give you example of japan they eat healthy food like veggies less cooked food which contain more nutrients and vitamins thats why they live up to 100 years they have less death rates less diseases

one thing i want to express taking proper diet is not much you have to do some exercie to digest your meals it gives you more advantge in our daily life people eats loats of calories junk food after eating they go to bed the body can digest it as it contains loats of calories as i ask recent the we should took care of it if your body is healthy you are good at every thing we must follows our meals time this is also important if we follow proper time of our meals it also have very good impact on our body health

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You make a relevant attempt to discuss healthy eating, mentioning junk food, exercise and the example of Japan. However, the response does not clearly answer either question: it gives little explanation of why people spend money on vitamin pills, and it does not set out practical ways to persuade them to improve their diets. The opening is also unclear about the prompt’s point that a healthy diet can provide necessary vitamins. Your ideas about diet and health are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported. The response contains 214 words, so it is 36 words below the required minimum; this limits the space available to address both parts. Develop a clear answer to each question and support each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a loose progression from the importance of vitamins to unhealthy eating and then to diet and exercise, so a reader can identify the general topic. However, the response is presented as one long, largely unpunctuated block, with no clear introduction, body paragraphs or conclusion. Connections between ideas are often difficult to follow: for example, the move from junk food to Japan’s life expectancy is abrupt, and “one thing i want to express” does not clearly signal how the next point answers the task. Repeated use of “and” and “which” also makes the writing feel run-on rather than logically organised. Use separate paragraphs for the reasons people buy pills and ways to encourage healthier eating, and link each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “vitamins,” “nutrients,” “junk food,” “calories,” “digestion” and “diseases,” which helps communicate the general subject. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “death rates” and “proper diet.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “healthy,” “body” and “lots of calories.” Some word choices or combinations are unclear or unnatural, such as “complete vitamins,” “heathy meal” and “less cooked food”; spelling errors such as “advantge” and “exercie” further reduce precision. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for causes and persuasion, such as “convenience,” “health claims,” “nutrition education” and “subsidise fresh produce.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “which” in the description of junk food and its effects, and you use some simple statements to express opinions. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are often missing, making several sentences run together and obscuring relationships between clauses. There are also recurring problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “people eats,” “we should took care” and “we must follows.” Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “the doctor is asking very good.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with one main idea, then check subject–verb agreement and verb forms; use full stops to separate ideas and commas where needed.

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