Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Doctors say we needs the all vitamis from the healthy food, because number of people buy the supplement medicine for the vitamins. i shall discuss these in upcoming paragraph before offering my suggestions.

to begin this peoples have a busy life, they have no time for making the healthly food, number of people work in outside of his state and country wihtout his faimly, so they have no time for cook the food, so they eat food from the hotel and restrurant, and you know very well outside food is just for taste not for good health.

other hand if you lived in gulf country there are you use only frozen fruit, vegitable and other things, and these things are also not good for your healthy body. when you are not eat the healthy food that time your body wants to others things for complete your body vitamins, that time people buy the vitamins pills for healthly body. if the person do not take these vitamins pills then his body feel weak, and body not work properly, if body not fit then you cannot focus on your work. i know it is very costly but they have not another way.

hence the people wants to all vitamins from the diet, then they wants the fresh food, vegitable, fruits and all good things where from they get all vitamins easily. so frist of person give some time to make for healthly food.

For example if i want healthly food then if i lived with my faimly then its ok otherwise i cooked food myself, i add all that things who makes my body healthly or fit. i am avoid the junk food. if some time i am eat outside but i tried number of time i eat healthly and fresh food, if i got all vitamins from my diet then not waste my money on this vitamins pills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that busy workers rely on restaurant food and that people may turn to supplements when their diet lacks nutrients, then recommend preparing fresh food. These ideas are relevant, but the explanation of why people spend large sums is only partly developed; for example, the claim that frozen produce is unhealthy is asserted rather than explained or supported. The second part is also brief: “give some time to make” healthy food is a suggestion, but you do not explain how people could be persuaded to do this, such as through practical cooking advice or public-health campaigns. Your personal example adds relevance, though the position and supporting reasons need clearer development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to reasons, a recommendation, and a personal example. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are joined in long chains with repeated “so,” “and,” and “that time.” The opening promises suggestions, but the recommendation is not clearly separated or developed. Some linking phrases, such as “other hand” and “hence,” do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas, and references such as “these things” are not always precise. Use one main point per paragraph, then connect it with clear cause-and-effect language and refer explicitly to the idea being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “vitamins,” “supplement,” “frozen fruit,” “junk food,” and “fresh food,” so the general subject is understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, particularly “healthy,” “food,” and “body,” and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “supplement medicine,” “outside food,” and “complete your body vitamins.” Frequent spelling errors—including “vitamis,” “vegitable,” “restrurant,” and “faimly”—also make the writing less clear and less fluent to read. Build a wider range of accurate phrases for nutrition and persuasion, and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you explain your ideas without relying on repeated basic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express causes and conditions using forms such as “because,” “if,” and “when,” but sentence structures are limited and many attempts at longer sentences are faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear throughout: “we needs,” “people have a busy life,” and “when you are not eat.” Articles and sentence construction are also often inaccurate, as in “the all vitamis” and “if body not fit then you cannot focus.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and complete sentence boundaries.

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