Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Healthy life is more important part of our life if it is good people can live healthy life and do any work without any problem. But now doctors tell us that we should take all the vitamins from the healthy diet which is crucial for us. while other believe that spend money on vitamin pill is good. So i will discuss why people spend money on vitamin pill instead of getting healthy diet also i will give some solution to improve peopl diet instead of buy the pills in upcoming paragraphs.

Fisrt and foremost, people spend money on vitamin pills have some reasons firsly, peopl have no time to prepare food for them self which is healthy because of their hectic scheduale that why they are not eating healthy food and they get viatmins pill which they get vitamin proper . Secondly vegetable and fruits are not fresh due to this people can not get the proper vitamin that why they get pills to consume the viatmin from the pills.

However, it have some solution like teacher should guide the children what to eat and which vegetable they eat at home or school if school universiity guide to children then they get aware and they can adopt it at their home and they really on it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions: you suggest that people lack time to prepare healthy food and may doubt the freshness of fruit and vegetables, then propose that teachers educate children about food choices. These are relevant starting points, but the response only partially develops the task. The reasons are stated rather than explained in detail, and the solution focuses narrowly on schools without explaining how adults could be persuaded or what practical steps might help. The opening also spends space on general statements about healthy living instead of establishing a clear, direct response. The response is 34 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to explain and support your ideas. Develop each point with a cause, consequence, or relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by a paragraph about reasons and a final paragraph offering a solution. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “However” help signal the movement between points. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph contains only one brief solution, and the relationship between some ideas is unclear. For example, “However” suggests a contrast, but the paragraph does not clearly contrast the reasons with the proposed solution. Several sentences run together, and repeated references to vitamin pills and healthy food make the links feel mechanical. Use separate, clearly developed paragraphs for each question, and connect ideas with precise references such as “This lack of time” or “To address this problem.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “hectic schedule,” “healthy diet,” “vitamin pills,” and “proper vitamins.” This gives the reader a basic sense of your ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “they get vitamin proper” and “they really on it.” Repetition of “people,” “healthy,” and “vitamin” also reduces variety. Aim to use accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling carefully; for instance, “vegetables and fruits” could be expressed more naturally as “fruit and vegetables,” and “spend money on vitamin pill” needs a more accurate plural phrase. Greater precision would make your reasons and recommendations clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because of their hectic schedule” and a conditional idea about schools guiding children. However, control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the reader work to understand the message. Examples include “Healthy life is more important part,” “people spend money on vitamin pills have some reasons,” and “if school university guide to children then they get aware.” These show problems with articles, sentence structure, agreement, and verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, particularly after sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear clauses using “because,” “if,” and “so.” Check each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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