Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

without any shred of doubt, vitamins are important in the body it helps to stay the body good and active. dr. suggest us we can get the vitamins from healthy diet, but mostly people try to use vitamin pills to fulfil the vitamin the body. I would like to discuss the reasons and solution for this problem in the paragraphs.

To start with, there are a lot of reasons of this trend. The first one is following the social media. To explain it more, nowadays a lot of people use social media apps like Instagram Facebook to watch the videos and share it with their friends. When they saw these on the social media apps with these ads and they want to try it. As a result, it increases the sales of vitamin pills. The second one is for the other people. To write it more, when they listen from their friends and saw someone. To eat these pill. They also want to be eat these pills it's going to be result of a uses of eating vitamin pills.

moreover, there are some solution to solve this problem. The first is doctors can take help from the government to set up the campaign.To explain it, doctors can spread the knowledge about the benefits of eating healthy diet, and also aware the people about the effects of vitamins, pills on the body. it will h help to use of healthy diet in this society. The second is people should not follow the social media. To explain it, companies of vitamins, increase their sales and earn profit by telling the benefits of uses of vitamin pills, but this is not given any benefits. People can eat healthy diet at their homes and it's going to be reduced the use of vitamin pills.

To conclude with it, people follow the social media so that they attract for the usage of vitamin pills, but they should understand them, exact benefits, and harmful effects on the body.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: social-media advertising and influence from friends are offered as reasons, while government-supported campaigns and relying less on online promotions are suggested as responses. These points are relevant, but the explanation is often unclear or under-developed. For example, the discussion of friends repeats that people see others taking pills without explaining why this persuades them or why they spend large sums. The proposed campaign is more specific, but its likely impact is asserted rather than illustrated. Your conclusion restates the social-media point but does not bring together both causes and solutions. Develop each main idea with a clear explanation and a concrete example, and make the link to spending heavily more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To start with,” “The first one,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the friends example: “when they listen from their friends and saw someone” is followed by several incomplete or unclear statements. Some linking phrases, including “To explain it more” and “To write it more,” are repeated mechanically and do not clarify the relationship between ideas. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect each explanation directly to its main point. Clearer sentence boundaries and references would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “vitamins,” “healthy diet,” “social media,” “campaign,” and “benefits,” so the general subject is clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making meaning difficult to interpret. For instance, “fulfil the vitamin the body” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “a uses of eating vitamin pills” is unclear. “Follow the social media” is also repeated where more precise wording about being influenced by online content would help. Build a broader set of accurate phrases for causes, persuasion, and health advice, and check collocations and word forms when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences with clauses, such as “People can eat healthy diet at their homes and it's going to be reduced the use of vitamin pills.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently make the message harder to understand. Examples include “vitamins are important in the body it helps,” where two clauses run together and the pronoun does not agree, and “when they listen from their friends and saw someone,” which mixes verb forms and leaves the sentence incomplete. Several sentences also lack clear boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses; proofread for subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, and full stops.

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