Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Physicians always suggest us that we can get our daily vitamins intake from our food specially from the healthy meals. In spite of this most people ignore their advice and spend a lot of money on vitamin supplements .

Usually, people spend their time mostly on social media and get influenced by their favourite influencer. Firstly, there are many influencer now a days are telling about the vitamins and healthy diet , Although they are not certified healthcare coach but they get money from the hosted company for promote their brand . But people don't know about this politics and they can easily seeks their advice. For instance, according to 'Red Cross Society' every year almost 1 million youngster purchased supplements without knowing their actual benefit . As they just follow some random people on youtube without knowing their profession. In addition , advertisment play an important role here. they just not attract the people because of their special effect but also play with the emotions of people to hire celebrities for their brand promotion. To illustrate , there are so many companies who hired cricketers for their brand promotion of energy drinks.

Secondly, one of the solution to this problem is people can go to some healthcare professional like nutritionist they will make their diet chart according to their health. Another solution is an individual can also tried to make food at home with some healthy ingredients like fresh vegetables and some also try some healthy homemade drinks like beetroot juice. Most of the healthy recipes are available on internet just follow the reliable source.

In conclusion, Despite of advice given from doctors on healthy diet people don't have to spend their money on vitamins . They are just advice to go to some professional person and also try homemade food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: social-media influencers and advertising are offered as reasons for buying supplements, while consulting a nutritionist and preparing healthy food are suggested alternatives. These points are relevant, and the examples about celebrity promotion and homemade beetroot juice help illustrate them. However, the explanation of why people spend large sums is not fully developed: the claim about influencers is broad, and the Red Cross statistic is presented without explaining how it supports the point. The solutions also need clearer explanation of how they would persuade people, rather than simply describing what individuals could do. A more explicit position and fuller development of each main idea would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “In addition,” and “Secondly” help signal the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the discussion moves from influencers to an unsupported statistic and then to advertising without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, and the conclusion repeats the advice rather than drawing the main ideas together. Improve cohesion by grouping each cause and solution into a clear sequence, using pronouns and linking expressions with precise references, and making the relationship between examples and claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “vitamin supplements,” “certified healthcare coach,” “brand promotion,” “nutritionist,” and “reliable source.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “people,” “healthy,” and “advice,” and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “politics” for the hidden commercial motives and “advertisment.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “hosted company” and “special effect.” These choices occasionally make the intended meaning less clear. Build a more precise vocabulary for marketing and nutrition, and check spelling and collocations so that your ideas sound natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “As,” and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, errors are frequent, and complex structures are often not controlled. For example, “Physicians always suggest us” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “there are many influencer now a days are telling” combines incompatible sentence structures. Agreement and verb forms are also inconsistent in “advertisment play” and “companies who hired.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly the lowercase “they” after a full stop and the comma splice in “Despite of advice given from doctors on healthy diet people…” Practise accurate clause construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding further complexity.

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