Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

According to doctors eating healthy can help us to get all the vital vitamins required for the body.Desite this a number of individuals spent their earning onto the vitamin tablets.In my opinion their are several reasons which i will discuss in this.

Firstly, Most of the people who purchase the pills may have some kind of allergy from the food which include the minerals and vitamins.As body needs these valuable things. So

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response begins to address the first question by suggesting that people buy supplements because they may have food allergies and still need vitamins. However, this idea is not explained or supported, and the response does not address how people could be persuaded to improve their diets. The introduction promises “several reasons,” but only one incomplete reason appears before the response stops. The position and reasoning therefore remain very limited, rather than developing a complete answer to both parts of the task. The response also falls short of the required minimum length, leaving too little space to explain the causes, propose practical persuasion methods, and give relevant examples. Develop each question in a separate body paragraph and support the points with specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement introduces the topic, and “Firstly” signals the start of a reason. This gives the reader some indication of the intended direction. However, the progression is not sustained: the opening promises several reasons, but the text ends during the first one, and there is no paragraph addressing the second question or a conclusion. The link “So” is left unfinished, while “In my opinion” does not clearly introduce a position. Use complete paragraphs with one clear purpose each, and connect the explanation to its result—for example, explain how allergies might lead someone to choose supplements. A complete structure would make the relationship between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “vital vitamins,” “vitamin tablets,” “allergy,” and “minerals,” so the subject is generally recognisable. There is also an attempt at a more formal register through phrases such as “According to doctors.” However, the range is narrow and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, including “spent their earning onto” and “the food which include.” “Valuable things” is vague when referring to nutrients, and “pills” and “tablets” are repeated without much variation. Aim for precise collocations such as “spend their earnings on supplements” and “foods that contain essential nutrients.” Careful spelling is also needed, as in “Despite,” not “Desite.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a longer opening sentence and a reason introduced by “Firstly,” but the range of structures is limited and control is inconsistent. Errors include “their are” instead of “there are,” “individuals spent” where the present tense is needed, and the incomplete construction “As body needs these valuable things. So”. The sentence beginning “Firstly” also runs into the next sentence without clear punctuation, and “the food which include” has a subject–verb agreement problem. These issues make parts of the response difficult to interpret, particularly at the end. Practise completing each sentence, maintaining consistent present-tense forms, and checking agreement and punctuation. For example: “Some people may have allergies to foods that contain essential nutrients, so they choose supplements instead.”

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