Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Vitamin pills has a Vital role for many individual around the globe and theirs also advantage of taking a vitamin pills for intance, a 60 years old up was prone to damage their bone so they need to strenghten their bones for example to drink a milk and take a vitamin b1, b2 and b3.

Around 57 to 80% of adults regularly use and purchase a vitamin supplements with their own money also numerous of adults are relying on vitamins pill to survive in any worst situations in their life. People are afraid of having a disease because they don't have any vitamins that can help them to fight viruses that affects their health.

According to statistic 25 to 40 percent of adults do not buy or take any vitamins pill at all because they are relying on their routine or way of diet for instance, they improve their mindset for them to overcome all calories and fats from different types of meat or food that can give a high calories or fats. Eating Vegetable and fruits is their way of extracting numerous amount of vitamins in their body and it can help or improve their diet routine.

There are a lot of People in this world are being died at the age of 30 to up because they don't have any form of exercise and diet routine also the way of living. They are both benificial to our body also different role in our body, so health is wealth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make an attempt to address both questions: fear of illness is offered as a reason for buying supplements, while fruit and vegetables are presented as a dietary alternative. However, the response only partially answers the task. The first paragraph focuses on older adults and bone strength, but the example is unclear and does not explain why people spend large sums on pills. The second question is addressed mainly by describing what some people eat; you do not explain how people could be persuaded to change, such as through public health advice or practical education. Several claims, including the percentages and deaths attributed to poor diet, are not explained or supported. Develop a clear answer to each question and use relevant, specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some paragraphing, and the response moves from supplement use to diet and health, so the reader can identify its broad subject. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the opening example, the statistics, and the later discussion of exercise and deaths are not connected into a clear argument. Linking expressions such as “for instance” and “also” are used, but they do not always show a precise relationship between ideas. References such as “they” and “it” can also be unclear. Organise the essay around the two questions, with one paragraph explaining why people buy pills and another explaining how to encourage healthier eating, then connect each example directly to its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “vitamin supplements,” “disease,” “vegetables,” “fruits,” and “diet routine,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to understand. For example, “relying on vitamins pill to survive in any worst situations” is not a natural way to describe why people take supplements, and “overcome all calories and fats” does not express a clear dietary idea. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “benificial” and “strenghten.” Build a more precise vocabulary for causes and persuasion, and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “because they don't have any vitamins” and one using “so” to explain a consequence. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “Vitamin pills has” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “There are a lot of People in this world are being died” combines incompatible structures and uses an incorrect passive form. The opening sentence also contains several clauses without clear grammatical connections. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement and verb forms as you revise.

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