Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

We are humans, and our body needs energy and nutrients more than we think. Doctors tell us that we don't have to spend our money to purchase vitamin pills; instead we can get all the vitamins by having a healthy diet.

To begin with, some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills because it is easier for them to take vitamins rather than changing their habits. Some people are too lazy to focus on their health. Maintaining a healthy diet is very difficult for them because they have a habit of eating unhealthy each day, so they take vitamins to avoid any deficiency. For example, a friend of mine is in my class. She is so conscious about her health. She told me that she likes to buy vitamins for herself to improve her hairs, but they have a habit of eating junk food everyday and she doesn't want to change her habits, so that's why she likes to spend her money on vitamins. Like this, many people purchase vitamins because of this reason.

The money they are spending on vitamins doesn't give them any advantage because if you are following a healthy diet and you are taking vitamins as well, you would face several health problems and the vitamins wouldn't give you an advantage because if the vitamin deficiency is harmful, the overdoses of vitamins are even more dangerous than you imagine. We should convince each other to buy more healthy food items and try to choose whole wheat and avoid refined flour. For instance, our family has decided to eat healthy which have more vitamins and minerals and we are trying to go to the super store for groceries with each other to avoid purchasing things which are harmful for us and less in vitamins.

To conclude, everyone have their own opinions, but focusing more on diet is better than taking vitamins.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you explain that pills are convenient and allow people to avoid changing established eating habits, and you recommend choosing healthier foods, such as whole grains, instead. The example about your friend makes the first reason more concrete, while your family’s grocery-shopping routine gives a relevant illustration of the proposed change. However, the explanation of why people spend large sums is mainly limited to convenience and reluctance to change; other possible influences, such as advertising or beliefs about quick results, are not explored. The advice on persuasion is also less developed: you suggest what people should do, but explain little about how they could be encouraged to do it. Develop these points with clearer reasoning and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement, moving from an introduction to reasons, proposed dietary changes, and a conclusion. Paragraphing helps distinguish the two main parts of the task, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “For example,” and “To conclude” make the progression easy to follow. Some connections, however, are repetitive or unclear. In the first body paragraph, “Like this, many people purchase vitamins because of this reason” repeats the preceding example rather than advancing the argument. The long sentence about your friend also makes the relationship between her hair concerns, junk food, and pill purchases difficult to track. Use more precise referencing and divide complex explanations into shorter, logically linked sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including relevant terms such as “nutrients,” “deficiency,” “overdoses,” and “refined flour.” There are also attempts to express health-related ideas beyond very basic language. However, several choices are imprecise or repetitive, which limits flexibility and naturalness. “Improve her hairs” is not an appropriate expression in this context, and “spend our money to purchase” is less natural than a concise alternative. The repeated use of “healthy,” “vitamins,” and “habits” also makes the discussion sound narrow. Build a wider set of accurate collocations for nutrition and persuasion, and check word forms and spelling, including “everyday” when you mean “every day.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “rather than,” and “if,” so the response shows some structural variety. Most meaning remains understandable, but some errors in agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “everyone have their own opinions” should use a singular verb, and “our family has decided to eat healthy which have more vitamins” has an unclear clause and agreement problem. The sentence beginning “The money they are spending…” also shifts between “they,” “you,” and “the vitamins,” making its structure difficult to follow. Aim to keep subjects and pronouns consistent, and check agreement and clause boundaries when combining ideas.

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