Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The last two decades have seen enormous chenges in people eating style. people can get all the vitamin in healthy food and others spend large money for vitamin tablets. I will discuss more with appropriate example further.

Helth paly vital role in life. That is way some people believe if they eat expensive vitamin tablets they become more healthy.In fact, some people do not want to maintain their diet that is why they eat this tablets and most people attreact from dvertisement; it is paly significant role to more people eat this tables. For instance, If some crickets or film ectors show in advertisement to eat this vitamin tables then people easily fallow that medication.

In this era everything is very expensive and that is why we people should fallow healthy diet insted of eat vitamin tablets. Although is people eat this pills is affect their body. This is not only government responsibility but it is individial. Authority should provide knowledge about helth and arrange camp for people to aware about their health. Indeed, people can become more helthy with less money they only maintain their diet. we can change this habbit if teachers teach how to maintain their diet in school and parents teach their children at home which is the best way.

In conclusion, people eat expensive vitamin pills because some of them is very old they have no option and other follow the famous persone and advertisment but authority can change this habbit with help media and some famouse persone to canvasing some massage through television.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that people are influenced by advertising and famous figures, and propose education through government campaigns, schools, parents and the media. These are relevant ideas, but they are only partly developed. For example, the claim that some people buy pills because they “do not want to maintain their diet” needs explanation, and the point about older people having “no option” is unclear and appears only in the conclusion. The response also gives little detail about how campaigns could persuade people to change their eating habits. Your position is broadly identifiable, but the conclusion introduces a reason that was not explained earlier. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion. The body paragraphs also broadly distinguish reasons for buying supplements from ways to encourage healthier eating. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the second paragraph moves from health to diet habits and then advertising without clearly showing how the points connect. Linking phrases such as “In fact,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” are used, but some connections are mechanical or unclear, and references such as “this tablets” make it harder to identify what is meant. The conclusion adds a new idea about older people rather than drawing together the earlier points. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each explanation directly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “healthy diet,” “vitamin tablets,” “advertisement,” and “government responsibility.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow. For example, “spend large money” is not a natural collocation, “people easily fallow that medication” does not clearly express the intended idea, and “canvasing some massage” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “chenges,” “Helth,” and “advertisment” are also noticeable. Aim to use a smaller set of precise, correctly spelled phrases rather than repeating “people,” “vitamin tablets,” and “healthy.” Learning collocations for advertising, nutrition and public education would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “although,” and “if.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to understand. For example, “some people do not want to maintain their diet that is why they eat this tablets” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation and has an incorrect demonstrative; “Although is people eat this pills is affect their body” is not grammatically complete; and “some of them is very old” has a subject–verb agreement error. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause at a time.

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