Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Healthy life-style is the biggest concern for all generations. Physician always support the diet plan instead of taking vitamins in person's routine. People might think that the vitamins supplement more helpful than the diet plan itself. That is why people take vitamins however, if they can get proper guidance on the benefits of diet plan and disadvantage of pills then it will help to beneficial for every individuals to save money on buying pills.

In today's fastest growing world, every person wants to get results as fast as possible. People even though aware about the importance of healthy food, they spend money on vitamins to get fulfilled their daily supplement intake. Sometimes people unaware about the daily intake of vitamins. Dietitian or nutritionist suggest them the vitamins especially for pregnant women.

These can be reduced by publishing the free diet programme. This kind of programme helps to get knowledge about how much healthy nutrients are there in our daily food. For example, lemon contains the vitamin C and it is works as a antioxidant and better for immune system. Moreover, beetroot helps to increase vitamin B12 level. last but not the least, almonds has rich in vitamin H and helps the hair quality and make the keratin level strong. This fruits or vegetable should be taken in a proper manner can help to maintain the vitamin level. The body needs to balance this supplement. Consequently, this awareness stop people to spend money on buying vitamins.

To conclude, although people spend money on vitamins, the proper education as well as guidance can direct them on the tract of vitamin use as well as how much diet is necessary in healthy lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions and maintain a relevant focus on why people buy supplements and how education might encourage healthier eating. The explanation that people want quick results and may be unsure about their daily vitamin needs is relevant, as is your proposal for free dietary programmes. The examples of foods and nutrients also help illustrate the advice. However, some points are not fully explained: for instance, you mention that nutritionists recommend vitamins to pregnant women but do not clarify how this contributes to spending large sums. The response would be stronger with more developed reasons, such as convenience, advertising, or concern about deficiencies, and a clearer explanation of how public education could change purchasing habits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, a paragraph on possible solutions, and a conclusion. This makes the main stages of your argument easy to identify. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Consequently,” and “To conclude.” However, some connections feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “These can be reduced” does not clearly identify what “these” refers to, and the transition from the examples of foods to “The body needs to balance this supplement” is difficult to follow. Grouping each reason and solution more explicitly, and using precise references instead of vague pronouns, would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “daily supplement intake,” “nutritionist,” “nutrients,” and “immune system.” These choices show an effort to discuss health and diet beyond very basic terms. Some less common expressions are attempted but are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “fastest growing world,” “get fulfilled their daily supplement intake,” and “on the tract of vitamin use.” There are also word-choice and form issues in phrases such as “healthy life-style” and “vitamins supplement.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but they reduce precision. Aim for natural collocations and check whether a noun, adjective, or verb form is needed in each phrase.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “if they can get proper guidance … then it will help” and a concessive opening with “although.” The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “Physician always support” needs a plural subject or an article and matching verb; “it is works” combines incompatible verb forms; and “almonds has” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “This fruits or vegetable should be taken” also has number-agreement problems. Practise checking subjects and verbs, and build complex sentences with a clear main clause.

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