Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Vitamins are extremely significant for human health, which we traditionally get from foods. On the contrary, few people spend hundreads of dollors on vitamins pills. There are several reasons that people spend money on it, and also there are some ways that people get all vitamins from diet. I will expain both questions in forthcoming paragraphs.

Discussing the first question, Nowadays, workload has surged among people, which encourage them to do long shifts. As a result, they have a tiny amount of time to do all household chorse. Eventually, They choose to eat fast foods. Therefore, they can not complete their daily vitamins, minerals, fiber needs. For this reason, they spend money to buy those pills to fulfill their body needs. In addition, artifical farming popularity has increased all among the globe to fulfill the human needs. It affects on the quality of the foods. Todays, people do not get all vitamins, and minerals from foods due to most of the vegetables are artifically grown, which have less amount of nutritional value compared to natural foods. Times of India article say that artifical farming foods have almost 60% of less nutritional value compared to natural foods.

Talking about second question, some companies in the world, who sell naturally grown foods like vegtables. It available all across the world. People should spend money to buy those products insted of artifical farming products to fullfill their needs. Furthermore, people should consult diet specialist doctor to make healthy diet plan according their body needs.

In conculsion, workload as well as artifical farming encourage to people spend money on vitamins pills. On other hand, people can buy natural foods from differnt comapney and make a healthy diet plan as per guidance of specialist to fullfill thhe body needs insted of taking pills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions and maintain a relevant focus: you explain that busy schedules can lead people to rely on fast food and supplements, and suggest buying naturally grown food and consulting a diet specialist. These points give the response a clear basis. However, the explanations are unevenly developed. The link between artificial farming and people choosing pills is asserted rather than fully explained, and the claim about a 60% nutritional difference is presented without context. The suggestions in the second part are also brief; explain how advice, access, or public information could persuade people to change their habits. More specific examples and fuller reasoning would make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each question, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “Discussing the first question” and “Talking about second question” help readers follow the structure, and the main ideas generally progress in a sensible order. This meets the lower-band expectation for clear organisation and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, the repeated formulaic transitions (“As a result,” “Therefore,” “For this reason”) make connections feel mechanical, and some references are unclear, such as “It available all across the world,” where the referent is not explicit. Use a wider range of linking methods and connect each explanation more smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “workload,” “nutritional value,” “artificial farming,” and “healthy diet plan.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “fulfill their body needs.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable and sometimes distract the reader: “hundreads of dollors,” “household chorse,” “artifical,” and “vitamins pills.” Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “spend money” and “needs.” This range is adequate for the topic, but greater accuracy and more natural collocations are needed. Check spelling carefully and learn common combinations such as “vitamin supplements,” “meet nutritional needs,” and “a balanced diet.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “which,” “As a result,” and “compared to,” so the response is not limited to short basic sentences. Most of the meaning remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur in agreement, articles, prepositions, and sentence construction. For example, “workload … which encourage them” needs subject–verb agreement, while “It available all across the world” is missing a verb. In “people spend money on it,” the pronoun reference is unclear, and “according their body needs” lacks the required preposition. Review sentence boundaries and basic agreement patterns, then proofread for missing words and punctuation. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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