Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills.

Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills?

How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this sedentory life-style inviduals are lees foucse on their diet, due to Vitamin deficiency in many unhealthy food in pupils diet, healthy food is suggested by health professionals such as doctors.There are many reasons for consumption of vitamin less food and there are many possible solution of this,which will be duscussed in this essay.

To begin with, the first cause of having vitamin pill is hectic schedule. To elaborate this statement, most of the people workig in corporate jobs where they have to work for long hours.After this long working day, they have to face heavy traffic jam on roads.This resulte into long stress day. After all this, they are chooing to get prepare food form restraunts insted of cooking at home.Restraunts are serving unhealthy food with less vitamin to increase their profit, which cause people to vitamin deficincy, and this can overcome by taking pills. In addition to this, fast food culture have significant impact on youngsters diet.Today, most of the yound peple love to explore fancy cafe and restruants rather than cooking at home, and they end up taking vitamin pill to get sufficient vitamins for therir body.

There are many possible soultion that can solve this problem. The first government can play significant role in this. To explain this, government can intoduced new strickt regulation on restaunt cooking as well as vitamin pill shoud be avilable with doctor priscription only.Also,social media have great impact on it. goverment can run campain to make people educate regarding their healthy diet.For younger generation,they can run new trend such as cooking at home or healthy diet to educate them.

Above this analysis, there are many reason for chossing vitamin pills insted of healthy diet, such as busy schedule and fast food culture for youngster. On the other hand there are many possible soultion for it,for example government regulation on cooking style and running new campain to eduacte people for their diet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions and maintain a relevant focus: you identify busy schedules and fast-food habits as reasons for buying supplements, then suggest government regulation and social-media campaigns to encourage healthier eating. These points are appropriate, but some are not fully explained. For example, the claim that restaurants serve food with fewer vitamins to increase profit needs clearer support, and the link between a hectic schedule and choosing pills could be made more explicit. Your proposed measures are also somewhat broad; explain how regulation or a campaign would change people’s choices in practice. A more developed example or explanation for each main idea would make the response more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally clear, and signposts such as “To begin with” and “In addition to this” help readers follow the discussion. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear: “Above this analysis” is not a natural way to introduce the conclusion, and “this” in “this can overcome by taking pills” has an unclear reference. The causes paragraph also moves from workers to young people without a clear transition. Use more precise referencing and connect each example explicitly to the main point of its paragraph to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “vitamin deficiency,” “hectic schedule,” “fast food culture,” “regulation,” and “healthy diet,” so the reader can understand the main ideas. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “corporate jobs” and “heavy traffic jam.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make reading difficult, for example “sedentory,” “foucse,” “restraunts,” and “deficincy.” Some word combinations are also unnatural, including “vitamin less food” and “long stress day.” Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for health and diet. More accurate, natural phrasing would make your vocabulary more effective without needing unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “where,” “After,” and “which,” and this gives the response some structural variety. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur across the essay. For example, “most of the people working in corporate jobs where they have to work” is an incomplete construction, while “fast food culture have” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “government can introduced,” the verb form is incorrect, and “vitamin pill should be available” needs an appropriate article or plural form. Several sentences also run together without clear punctuation. Practise building complete sentences and checking agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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