Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given two maps illustrates road access to a city hospital in 2007 to 2010. These maps explains about the changes of city hospital.

Overall, around the city hospital is ring road, in front of hospital in one side is car park that are uses for staff and public. In 2010

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic and mention the ring road and the shared staff-and-public car park in 2007, so the response is relevant to the maps. However, it does not provide a usable overview of the changes: the final phrase, “In 2010”, is unfinished, and the key developments—separate staff and public car parks, a bus station replacing the stops, and roundabouts—are not reported. The description of the car park as being “in front” is also unclear and does not accurately establish its position east of Hospital Road. At 43 words, the response is substantially below the required 150 words; this leaves the task only minimally addressed. To improve, complete the comparison and report the main changes in both maps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the maps, followed by a paragraph beginning “Overall”. This gives the reader a simple starting point, but the ideas do not progress into a complete description. The overview ends abruptly with “In 2010”, and there are no developed details or comparisons to connect. The phrase “These maps explains about the changes” repeats the introduction rather than advancing the account. Use a clear sequence: introduce the maps, summarise the main changes, then describe the road and transport features in 2007 and 2010. Complete each sentence and use linking expressions such as “By 2010” to make the comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “road access”, “city hospital”, “ring road” and “car park”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is too limited to describe the important map changes, and some phrases are imprecise or unnatural. For example, “in front of hospital in one side” does not clearly locate the car park, while “car park that are uses for staff and public” makes its function difficult to express naturally. Build a more precise range for map descriptions, including “east of”, “adjacent to”, “replaced by” and “separate”. These choices would help you report locations and changes accurately without relying on vague wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and an overview, but the response shows limited control of basic sentence forms and agreement. In “The given two maps illustrates”, the plural subject requires “illustrate”; similarly, “These maps explains” should use “explain”. The phrase “car park that are uses” contains errors in both agreement and verb form, and “in 2007 to 2010” does not form a correct time expression. The final “In 2010” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Practise accurate plural subjects, articles and verb forms, then use complete sentences to compare the years—for example, “In 2010, the bus stops were replaced by a bus station.”

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