Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the maps compared the road access to city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

the maps shows a significant development occure throughout the time firtsly there was bus stop in 2007 was replaced by roundabout and changes in parking stand public and staff also new bus staion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the topic and time period, and you recognise that access arrangements changed, mentioning bus stops, parking and a new bus station. However, the response gives only a very brief summary and does not describe the main changes accurately or clearly: the bus stops were removed and replaced by a bus station, while roundabouts were added at both ends of Hospital Road. It also misses the separation of staff and public parking and the new public car park beside Ring Road. The phrase “bus stop … was replaced by roundabout” misrepresents the changes. The response is 46 words, below the required 150, so it cannot provide the overview and supporting comparisons needed. Describe the 2007 layout first, then summarise the key developments in 2010.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall sequence: it introduces the maps and then attempts to summarise the changes. The linking word “firstly” signals an order, and the reader can identify the general topic. However, the ideas are compressed into one sentence, with no clear separation between the overview and specific details. The list-like ending—“changes in parking stand public and staff also new bus staion”—does not show how these features relate to one another. Use separate sentences or paragraphs to organise the comparison, and connect changes explicitly with phrases such as “By 2010” and “In addition.” Clearer punctuation and reference would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a few relevant terms, including “road access,” “bus stop,” “roundabout,” “parking,” and “bus station,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the vocabulary range is very limited, and several spelling and word-choice problems reduce clarity: “occure,” “firtsly,” and “staion” are misspelled, while “parking stand” is not an appropriate expression for the car parks shown. The phrase “bus stop … was replaced by roundabout” also uses the map vocabulary imprecisely, since the stops were removed and a bus station was added, while roundabouts were constructed at the road junctions. Build a more precise set of terms for describing locations and changes, such as “was converted into,” “was relocated,” and “was added.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to communicate a comparison using a past-time reference, and the basic meaning is partly recoverable. However, grammatical control is uneven. In “the maps shows,” the plural subject requires a plural verb; “the maps compared” also gives the maps an awkward role as the agent of comparison. The clause “there was bus stop in 2007 was replaced” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the two ideas, and it needs an article before “bus stop.” The final sequence beginning “and changes in parking” is not a complete sentence. Use straightforward, complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and articles, for example: “In 2007, bus stops lined Hospital Road. By 2010, they had been replaced by a bus station.”

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