Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These two maps shows the road access to a city hospital over a period of three years.

overall, it is clear that there are some changing that have been done in hospital maps.

In 2007,the hospital is surronded by a ring road and in the right corner of the hospital there was parking for the public and staff but in 2010 ,there were two parking space avaiable one for the public and other parking for the staff behind the public parking.

In 2007, there was a hospital road alongside the path and both the sides of the hospital road there was a bus stops.

In 2010,a roundabout was introduced. On the one side of the roundabout the car parking was avaiable for staff of the hospital and on the other side of the roundabout,bus station was built.

In addition,one more roundaboutbwas built in the end of the hospital road that lead to city road .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main subject and report several relevant changes, including the separation of staff and public parking, the replacement of bus stops by a bus station, and the addition of roundabouts. However, the overview is vague (“some changing”) and does not clearly summarise the overall transformation. Some locations are also inaccurate or unclear: the 2010 public car park is east of the Ring Road, not behind the staff car park, and the bus station is west of Hospital Road rather than simply “on the other side” of a roundabout. To strengthen the response, give a precise overview and compare the maps systematically, including the bus stops’ removal and the new public car park’s access from Ring Road.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the 2007 layout to changes in 2010, and uses simple linking expressions such as “In addition” and “In 2010.” This gives the reader some sense of chronology. However, the ideas are presented in one continuous block, and the progression between features is not always clear. Phrases such as “on the one side” and “on the other side” do not establish which locations are being compared, while repeated openings with “In 2007” and “In 2010” make the organisation mechanical. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and group related changes—for example, road access, parking, and bus facilities—so that the relationships are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “ring road,” “roundabout,” “car parking,” and “bus station,” so the reader can identify the main features being described. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “some changing,” “parking space available,” and “alongside the path.” Spelling errors, including “surronded” and “roundaboutbwas,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise location and change language, such as “located to the east of,” “was converted into,” or “was replaced by.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “parking” when “car park” or “parking facilities” would express the idea more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses joined with “but” and “that,” and the general meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors are frequent, and some sentence structures are difficult to follow. For example, “These two maps shows” has subject–verb disagreement, while “both the sides … there was a bus stops” contains problems with number and sentence construction. Tense use also shifts between “there was” and “were” without a consistent pattern, and punctuation spacing is often inaccurate. Practise forming clear comparison sentences with accurate agreement and articles, such as “In 2007, bus stops were located on both sides of Hospital Road; by 2010, they had been replaced by a bus station.”

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