Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given diagram illustrates the map of the city hospital between the two different years from 2007 to 2010. Firstly around the ring road and in the centre of the road thier was city hospital and in the east side of hospital thier was bus stop Moreover in the middle thier was a hospital road and east side thier wasa car park area for staff and public. In the downward side of a car park thier was acity road it was the map of 2007 city hospital.

On the other hand, in the north side thier wasa ring road around the city hospital and in the east side of hospital thier was a public car park area in themiddle thier was a hospital road behind the road thier was a bus station And in the front side thier was astaff carpark area. the city road are held on the south east corner. Moreover in the front of staff car park thier was a circle that was round about and this was amap of city hospital of 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two years and mention several relevant features, including the hospital, Hospital Road, car parks, bus facilities and the roundabout. However, the account only partially reports the map changes, and some locations are inaccurate or unclear. For example, in 2007 the bus stops were on both sides of Hospital Road, not simply “in the east side of hospital”; in 2010 the public car park was east of Ring Road, while the staff car park remained east of Hospital Road. The response also misses key comparisons: the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, and two roundabouts were added at the road junctions. A clear overview of these main changes, followed by accurate location details, would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic two-part structure: it describes 2007 first and then introduces 2010 with “On the other hand.” This gives the reader some sense of the time sequence, and the repeated references to the roads and car parks help maintain the topic. However, the progression within each section is difficult to follow because several details are joined in long strings, with little punctuation or clear separation. Connectors such as “Moreover” are repeated without showing a precise relationship between ideas, and references like “in the front side” and “behind the road” are unclear. Organise each map description around the hospital, roads and transport facilities, and use clear location phrases to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic set of relevant terms, including “ring road,” “hospital road,” “car park,” “bus station” and “round about,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and some choices are imprecise for describing maps. Phrases such as “downward side,” “front side” and “in the middle” do not clearly identify compass directions or positions, while “circle” is less suitable than the map term “roundabout.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “thier,” “wasa” and “carpark,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range of location language—such as north of, east of, adjacent to and connected to—and check spelling and standard forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response relies on simple clauses, often linked together, and there is little accurate variety in sentence structure. Errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between features difficult to understand. For example, “in the east side of hospital thier was a public car park area in themiddle” lacks clear articles and punctuation, while “the city road are held” has incorrect subject–verb agreement and an unclear verb form. Past-tense descriptions also need consistent, accurate forms, as in “there was” rather than “thier was.” Use shorter, complete sentences with correct articles and agreement, and practise combining them with accurate clauses such as “A bus station was built west of Hospital Road.”

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