Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the 2 maps illustrate the changes around and near a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall,bus stops disappeared and bus station was built after two years. Staff parking and public car park were same before but it was separated after two years.

In 2017, there were 6 bus stops near the hospitals. The road structure was simplified and easy. Staff and public were using the same car parking. Ring road had surrounded the city hospital.

In 2010, staff car park and public car park got separated from each other, Moreover, a proper bus station had been built. Two roundabout had cunstructed on two different roads. One infront of city hospital and other on the city road. Bus stop was demolished. Public car park was built on left of hospital and staff parking was built directly opposite to bus station. One way to the bus station is at roundabout on city rad and the other way is at roundabout on ring road,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main changes: the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, parking was divided into staff and public facilities, and two roundabouts were added. These are relevant features, and the overview gives the reader a general sense of the redevelopment. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. The public car park was built east of the Ring Road, not “on left of hospital,” and the roundabouts were at the Ring Road and City Road junctions rather than “in front of” the hospital. The opening reference to “2017” is also incorrect; the map shows 2007. To make the account more complete and precise, describe the locations using the roads and compass directions shown, and avoid unsupported descriptions such as “the road structure was simplified.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the two years. This helps distinguish the general changes from the map details. However, progression within the paragraphs is weak, and several ideas are joined in a list-like way. The final paragraph moves from parking to roundabouts, bus stops, and access routes without a clear organising pattern. Linking words such as “Moreover” and “One way” are used, but they do not always make the relationships between details clear; the final sentence is also left with a comma. Group information by feature—for example, first transport changes, then parking—and use clear references such as “the former bus stops” to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bus station,” “staff car park,” “public car park,” and “roundabout,” so the main features can generally be understood. There is also an attempt to describe change with phrases such as “disappeared,” “separated,” and “built.” However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or unnatural: “the road structure was simplified and easy” does not clearly describe a map feature, while “parking” and “built” are repeated. Spelling errors such as “cunstructed” and “rad” also reduce accuracy. Use precise location and change vocabulary, such as “to the east of,” “was converted into,” or “was replaced by,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “Two roundabout had cunstructed” needs a plural noun and a passive form (“Two roundabouts were constructed”), while “One infront of city hospital and other on the city road” is a fragment and lacks articles. “Staff and public were using the same car parking” is also awkwardly formed. Capitalisation and comma use are inconsistent, including “Overall,bus” and the comma splice at the end. Practise accurate past passive forms and complete sentences, then proofread each sentence for articles, plurals, and punctuation.

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