Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two maps illustrate the trasnportation system around the city hospital from 2007 to 2010.

Overall, there are significant changes in roads and hospital features, whereas there are added two roundabout and change the location of bus station.

In 2007, bus stop and car parks for public and staffs placed in right and left sides of hospital. In contrast, in 2010,the bus station placed at left side of hospital,where two round roads connected with bus stations.The round roads placed front and back sides of hospital ring roads and the hospital ring road right sides made staff car parks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify that the maps show changes between 2007 and 2010 and mention the new roundabouts and the bus facility, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the account is only partial: it does not clearly describe the hospital’s position within the Ring Road, the road’s connection to City Road, or the new public car park and its access from Ring Road. Some details are inaccurate or unclear, especially the claim that the bus station is connected to “two round roads” and that the ring road’s right side “made staff car parks.” The response is also below the required 150 words, leaving the main changes insufficiently reported. Include a clear overview and describe the key changes precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing the two years. The contrast marker “In contrast” also signals a comparison. These features make the general direction understandable. However, the progression within the description is difficult to follow because several locations and connections are compressed into one sentence, such as “where two round roads connected with bus stations.” The reference to “right and left sides” is also unclear without specifying the road or the map’s orientation. Use separate sentences to describe the road layout, bus changes, and car parks, and connect each feature to a clear landmark. This would make the organisation more coherent and the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “transportation system,” “roundabout,” “bus station,” and “car parks,” and you attempt to compare the two maps. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate enough to make details unclear. For example, “round roads” is not the appropriate term for roundabouts, while “placed in right and left sides” and “made staff car parks” do not express the locations or changes naturally. There is also a spelling error in “trasnportation.” Build a more precise set of location and change phrases, such as “to the east of,” “was converted into,” and “was added,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, including a contrast sentence beginning “In contrast,” but grammatical control is uneven. Several clauses lack the articles or verb forms needed for clear description: “bus stop and car parks … placed” needs a subject and an appropriate passive verb, while “there are added two roundabout” has incorrect word order, agreement, and tense. The sentence about the bus station also joins several ideas without a clear grammatical relationship. Punctuation spacing is inconsistent, as in “2010,the” and “hospital,where.” Practise accurate past passive forms such as “A bus station was added” and use shorter sentences when describing multiple locations. This will improve clarity while allowing you to show a wider range.

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