Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map compares the road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. There are sevral changes. The major change was public car park and bus station. This both things build in 2010. Public car park is on the left side of city hospital meanwhile bus station is held on right side of hospital road. The location of ring road city hospital remain consistent. In 2007 there was a car park staff and public but in 2010 they have shift the staff inside only public car park left outside. On the lower side of city road their is a roundabout either on 2007 there was a bus stop there. Overall there are not many changeses but they have built a road very well in 2007 the road is straight but in 2010 they can renovate it into circles that look very good also they have remove symbols from hospital road .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and mention several relevant changes, including the new bus station, the separation of staff and public parking, and the roundabouts. However, some locations are misreported: the public car park is east of Ring Road, not on the left of the hospital, and the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not on its right. The southern roundabout was added at the City Road junction; there was no bus stop there in 2007. The overview is also unclear and includes subjective comments such as “look very good” rather than summarising the main changes. The response is 144 words, below the required 150, and eight words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop a more accurate overview and describe the key changes precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the comparison, lists some changes, and ends with an overall comment. Linking expressions such as “but,” “meanwhile,” and “Overall” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several features are combined in unclear sentences, for example, “In 2007 there was a car park staff and public but in 2010 they have shift the staff inside only public car park left outside.” The final sentence also moves between road shape, appearance, and removed symbols without clearly organising these points. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main details, and group changes by location or feature. Clearer referencing would help readers understand which car park or road each sentence describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “car park,” “bus station,” “roundabout,” and “Hospital Road,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the map description hard to interpret. For example, “the bus station is held on right side” is not a natural way to describe its position, and “they have shift the staff inside” does not clearly express the change in parking designation. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “acces,” “sevral,” and “changeses.” Practise precise location phrases such as “to the west of” and “on the eastern side of,” and use verbs such as “was added,” “was converted,” or “was designated” for map changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences are simple, and you attempt some longer structures using “but,” “meanwhile,” and “overall.” However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently. Examples include “This both things build in 2010,” “they have shift,” and “their is a roundabout”; these forms make relationships between the features unclear. The sentence beginning “Overall there are not many changeses” also runs several ideas together without effective punctuation. Work on past passive forms for map changes, such as “A bus station was built,” and check subject–verb agreement and articles. Short, accurate sentences would make the comparisons clearer before you attempt more complex structures.

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