Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate the road access to a hospital in the city, how it was in 2007 and how it looked in 2010.

Overall, improvements were made on the road. A roundabout was constructed close to the hospital as well as the erection of a bus station.

In 2007, the southwest area had only a car park which was used by staff and the public, this was improved upon in 2010, with the construction of a massive bus station for the populace. However, the other area where the staff car park occupied remained unchanged while the public car park was moved further to the upper right side of the city hospital.

Furthermore, a roundabout was constructed to the eastern side of the hospital just close to the staff car park. Hence, the ring road surrounding the hospital remained unchanged, whereas mini road abouts were made just in front of the hospital and further away from to hospital to give links to the hospital road and the city road.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the two years and give an overview of the main changes, including the bus station, separate parking, and roundabouts. Several details are relevant, but some are unclear or inaccurate: the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not in the southwest area where the 2007 car park stood, and the new public car park is east of Ring Road rather than simply “further to the upper right.” You also describe a roundabout on the eastern side of the hospital, whereas the maps show roundabouts at the Ring Road and City Road junctions with Hospital Road. The ring road itself remains, but the changes to bus access and parking could be reported more precisely and systematically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the changes. Time markers such as “In 2007” and “in 2010,” along with “Furthermore” and “whereas,” help connect the information. However, the progression within the final paragraph is less clear: the roundabout description shifts into a broad statement about “mini road abouts” without clearly distinguishing the two junctions. Some references, such as “the other area” and “this,” make it harder to identify which feature is being discussed. Organising the details by location or by change—bus access, parking, then road layout—and using more precise references would make the comparison easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “constructed,” “remained unchanged,” “surrounding,” and “links.” These choices help communicate the general development. Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for map reporting, however. “Improvements were made on the road” is vague, while “erection of a bus station” and “for the populace” sound overly formal or unsuitable in this context. “Mini road abouts” is not an accurate or natural term for the two roundabouts. Aim for concise, conventional map vocabulary such as “road layout was modified,” “a bus station was added,” and “roundabouts were installed at both junctions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the contrast in “whereas the ring road … remained unchanged” and the clause beginning “while the public car park…”. Most of the meaning remains understandable, but some sentence construction and punctuation need attention. The sentence beginning “In 2007, the southwest area…” joins two independent ideas with a comma; separate them or use a conjunction. In “further away from to hospital,” the preposition pattern is faulty, and “how it was in 2007 and how it looked in 2010” is an awkward construction. There is also an unnecessary comma after “Overall.” More controlled sentence boundaries and clearer grammatical phrasing would improve accuracy.

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