Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagrams illustrates the information about the road access to a hospital in 2007 and 2010.

It is clearly seen that in 2007, the city hospital linked with rod was very conjusted and a single road. Individual was suffered from reaching the hospital because one road was linked with the hospital there was no other way to reached the hospital. There were 6 bus stop beside the parking.

In 2010, the two roundabout was installed in front of the hospital and other was attached with city road. The bus station was also built and linked with roundabout and further development was the public car park with the hospital between the rroads the staff parking only.

In conclusion, the city hospital in 2010 was very accessable for the individuals and they easily reach the hospital with the help of rounabout and also the bus station becasue the hospital road was linked.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the two years and report several relevant changes: the 2010 roundabouts, the bus station, and the separation of staff and public parking. This gives the response a relevant overview of improved access. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the 2007 hospital is described as linked by a single road, but the map shows Hospital Road connecting Ring Road and City Road; the six bus stops were along Hospital Road, not “beside the parking.” The public car park’s location and direct access from Ring Road are also not clearly reported. The conclusion focuses on accessibility but repeats earlier points rather than summarising the main changes precisely. Select the key before-and-after features and describe their locations accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each year, and a concluding statement. The sequence from 2007 to 2010 is easy to follow, and phrases such as “In 2010” and “In conclusion” help signal progression. This is a coherent arrangement, though some connections between details are unclear. For example, “the public car park with the hospital between the rroads the staff parking only” makes the relationship between the two car parks difficult to understand. The conclusion also repeats the idea of improved access without adding a clear summary. To strengthen progression further, group related changes together and use clearer references to the roads, parking areas, and transport facilities.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “bus station,” “public car park,” and “staff parking,” so the reader can identify the main types of development. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the description difficult to interpret. “The city hospital linked with rod” is not a clear way to describe the road layout, while “very conjusted” does not accurately express the map’s features. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “accessable,” “rounabout,” and “becasue.” Use precise map language such as “connected to,” “located east of,” and “replaced by,” and check spelling carefully. This would make your descriptions more accurate and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, for example, “In 2010, the two roundabout was installed in front of the hospital and other was attached with city road.” However, errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. Examples include “The diagrams illustrates,” “the two roundabout was,” and “Individual was suffered.” The final sentence also joins several ideas with “and” and “because,” making its structure difficult to follow. Aim for accurate, shorter sentences first, then add controlled complex forms. For example: “In 2010, two roundabouts were added, one at each end of Hospital Road. A bus station was built to its west.” Check plural subjects and verb forms, and use articles consistently.

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