Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two maps illustrate road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Overall, during the years city hospital improve few facilities to the customers and hospital staff. It showing two car parks in 2010. In addition, bus top became to the modern over the period. Roads and hospital location were same as the comparing with both two years. While two roundabouts were built in 2010.

Initially, by 2007 only one car park available to the staff and public customers at the same place. But in 2010 it was quite changed. Public car park moved into the north side right hand next to the hospital. Whereas, staff car park location same as the in 2007. Moreover, bus stop was became more modern in 2010. It had two paths for the bus entrance and outing. Furthermore, two roundabout access were added into the after construction. One roundabout located in bottom of the map it access to the city road, bus station and hospital road. Other located in middle of the map it access to the car parks and bus station.

In summary, between 2007 and 2010 it developed several facilities to the customers and staff. Although several places were changed over the time. However, at the same time hospital road, ring road, city road and city hospital was not changed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main changes and provide an overview: the roads and hospital remain in place, while car parking and bus facilities change and two roundabouts are added. Several details are accurately reported, including the staff car park remaining east of Hospital Road and the bus stops being replaced. This meets the task well, and the overview shows some synthesis rather than simply listing map labels. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the public car park did not move to the north side next to the hospital; it was newly added east of Ring Road. The bus station is not simply a more modern bus stop, and the roundabouts’ connections are described imprecisely. More precise reporting of these features would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, a paragraph describing changes, and a concluding summary. The sequence from the 2007 arrangement to the 2010 changes is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or confusing: “Initially” does not clearly establish a comparison, and “In summary” repeats the overview rather than adding useful information. The contrast markers “Whereas” and “Although” are not always integrated into complete, clear relationships. Group the changes into a more direct comparison of parking and bus access, and use fewer, more precise connectors and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “car park,” “roundabout,” “access,” and “location,” so the reader can understand the general subject. There are also attempts to describe change with phrases such as “over the period” and “were added.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “bus top” is used for bus stops or the bus station, “outing” is unsuitable for a road exit, and “improve few facilities to the customers” does not express the changes naturally. “Moved” also misrepresents the new public car park. Choose precise map terms and practise common collocations for describing additions, replacements, and locations; this will make the account clearer and more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including contrasts with “Whereas” and “Although,” and the main message is usually recoverable. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. For example, “city hospital improve few facilities” needs a past-tense verb and a grammatical object, while “It showing two car parks” lacks an auxiliary. Agreement and articles are also problematic in “two roundabout access were added” and “hospital road … was not changed.” Some clauses are fragments or awkwardly joined, such as “Whereas, staff car park location same as the in 2007.” Practise complete clauses, past-tense reporting, and subject–verb agreement, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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