Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The maps illustrate the road access for the people to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

In 2010, the city hospital map was quite better than city hospital map in 2007.It was very comfortable,beautiful design and easier access for the public and staff.

The map in 2007 of city hospital was little bite incomplete like no proper sapce for parking,not manging the traffc and alternate route not available for the huge traffic.It was not properly designed just the straight road and alot off bus station in straight.

The map in 2010 of city hospital was much better.It solve the problems which created by previous map designed.This map had proper parking space for public car and staff cars and also have some roundabout for trafic control.This map also had alternative route of bus station which people could use and access the hosptal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two years and recognise that the 2010 layout introduced separate parking and roundabouts, which are relevant changes. However, the response mainly evaluates the design rather than objectively summarising the maps. Some claims are unsupported or inaccurate: the 2007 map already shows a car park for staff and the public, and the 2010 bus station is not an alternative route to the hospital. Important changes, including the removal of the individual bus stops and the new public car park east of Ring Road, are not clearly reported. The response is also 134 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail available. Describe the locations and changes directly, and avoid judging the maps as “beautiful” or “better.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall sequence: it introduces the maps, describes the 2007 arrangement, and then discusses 2010. This gives the reader a general sense of comparison. However, the progression is weakened by repeated evaluations such as “much better” and “quite better,” rather than a clear, feature-by-feature account. The second paragraph also combines several separate points—parking, traffic, and routes—without showing how they relate. Use a concise overview followed by one paragraph on the 2007 layout and another on the changes by 2010, with clear links such as “By contrast” and “In addition.” This would make the organisation more purposeful and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “roundabout,” “parking space,” “traffic control,” and “public car,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the description unclear. For example, “a lot of bus station in straight” does not clearly describe the bus stops, while “alternative route of bus station” mislabels the bus station’s access roads. Spelling errors such as “traffc,” “hosptal,” and “manging” also reduce precision. Build a more accurate set of map-description terms, including “bus stops,” “bus station,” “access road,” and “separate car parks,” and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences are simple, and there are attempts to link ideas with clauses, as in “This map also had proper parking space … and also have some roundabout.” However, verb forms and agreement are often inconsistent: “It solve” should be “It solved,” and “had … and also have” shifts tense within the same sentence. Articles and plurals are also frequently missing or incorrect, as in “some roundabout” and “a lot off bus station.” Punctuation and spacing errors, including the missing space after the full stop in “2007.It,” further affect readability. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and check each sentence for subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms.

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