Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Given maps demonstrate the routes to access the city hospital in the year of 2007 and 2010.We are going to interpret the information given in these figures.

There was single road leading to city hospital in 2007 whereas there is number of ways to access hospital in the year of 2010, and lot's of amminities were added in this year.Additionaly plenty of roundabout was constructed in 2010 while lack in previous year map, these roundabout gives a multiple ways to access the health facility center.

Difference in parking has been seen between the maps,in past there was mutual parking area for public and staff in eastern side of hospital road whereas they have seprated the public and staff car parking area, public car parking is adjacent to hospital can reach there by following ring road directions, while parking area for hospital workers is located on the easteren side of hospital road. A new bus station has also built in west side of hospital road .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main changes between the maps: the shared car park becomes separate staff and public facilities, bus stops are replaced by a bus station, and roundabouts are added. These are relevant features, and your comparison of the parking arrangements is particularly clear. The overview that access became more developed is also supported by the maps. However, some details are imprecise: the hospital is not shown as having “a number of ways” of direct access, and the bus station is west of Hospital Road, not simply an additional route. The claim that the roundabouts provide “multiple ways” to reach the hospital is not explained. To strengthen the response further, report the road connections more precisely and cover the removal of the individual bus stops explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable progression: it first compares access and roundabouts, then discusses parking and the bus station. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “while,” and “also” help show contrasts and additions. However, the ideas are compressed into two long paragraphs, and the opening sentence about interpreting the figures does not contribute useful information. Some connections are unclear, particularly the shift from roundabouts to “multiple ways” of access, and the final sentence is appended without a clear concluding overview. Organise the response into a brief introduction, a distinct overview, and paragraphs grouping the road and transport changes. This would make the progression clearer and reduce the reliance on long, loosely connected sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of map vocabulary, including “routes,” “roundabout,” “parking area,” “Ring Road,” and “bus station,” so the main features are usually identifiable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “Difference in parking has been seen.” However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, including “mutual parking area,” “plenty of roundabout,” and “health facility center.” Spelling errors such as “amminities,” “Additionaly,” “seprated,” and “easteren” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard map-description expressions such as “shared car park,” “several roundabouts,” and “hospital,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons sound clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrasts with “whereas” and “while,” and the reader can generally follow the intended comparisons. However, some sentences contain several grammatical problems that make the relationships between ideas less clear. For example, “There was single road … whereas there is number of ways” has missing articles and inconsistent tense; “A new bus station has also built” needs a passive form such as “was also built”; and “these roundabout gives” has a plural-subject agreement error. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas. Use past tense consistently for both maps, check articles and subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into shorter, controlled clauses.

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