Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given maps illustrate the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

In 2007, the city hospital is surrounded by ring road while there are different bus stops on the both sides of road in front of the hospital. Public and staff car parking is on the east side of the bus station followed by the city ride and have an opening area towards hospital.

In 2010, more public facilities are added around city hospital. Roundabouts are built on both city road and hospital road and linked with the bus station separately on the left side of hospital road while staff car parking is on the right side of hospital road. Public car parking built separately on the right side of hospital.

Overall, a lot of upgradations are involved in 2010 ecpecially separate parking for staff and public, a separate bus station. Roundabouts are also builts so the traffic follow will not disturbed. In 2007, the hospital map is not well organized and didn't have much facilities for the public.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change over time: the bus stops are replaced by a bus station, parking is separated for staff and the public, and roundabouts are added. These are relevant features, and the comparison between the two years is clear in broad terms. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: in 2007 the shared car park is east of Hospital Road, not east of a bus station, and in 2010 the public car park is east of Ring Road rather than simply on the right of the hospital. The claim that the 2007 layout was “not well organized” and that the roundabouts prevent traffic disruption is an unsupported judgement. Describe locations precisely and keep the overview focused on observable changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from the 2007 map to the 2010 map and then giving an overall summary. This makes the broad comparison easy to follow. However, the overview comes last, so the reader encounters details before the main pattern is stated. Some links between features are also unclear, particularly “followed by the city ride” and “linked with the bus station separately,” which make the spatial relationships difficult to understand. Use a brief overview after the introduction, then organise the body paragraphs by year or by changes to roads, parking and public transport. Clearer reference to locations would make the progression more consistent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary such as “surrounded,” “roundabouts,” “bus station” and “separate,” which helps communicate the main changes. There is also some attempt to use more formal language, including “illustrate” and “facilities.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “city ride” appears to mean “City Road,” “upgradations” is unnatural here, and “traffic follow” does not express the intended idea. Spelling errors such as “ecpecially” and “builts” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional terms for map features and avoid evaluative wording such as “not well organized”; describe what was added or relocated instead.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and the main time contrast between 2007 and 2010 is generally understandable. However, some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “on the both sides of road” has problems with article use and number, while “Public and staff car parking is” has agreement and phrasing issues. In “Roundabouts are built on both city road and hospital road,” the articles and plural forms are not controlled. The final sentence also shifts awkwardly between past and present (“is not well organized and didn't have”). Check articles, singular/plural agreement and consistent tense, and use shorter sentences when describing several locations at once.

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