Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the two maps are showing that in 2007 and 2010, road access to the City Hospital are same. in 2007, Hospital was accessed through hopital Road which was connected with the City Road. There were six bus stops while a big parking lot for the public as well as the staff of the hospital. In 2010, major development and a proper bus station was constructed. Althoug the Hospital is still connected through hospital road while Ring Road is passing around the hospital. Major Changes seen were the Parking Lot and Bus Station. two round about have been made connecting the hospital with Hospital Road and City Road, while a bus station on the left and staff car parking opposite to the bus station. For General Public, Parking lot was mad on the Ring road, right side of the hospital. In 2007 there were six bus stops while in 2010 bus stops are completely demolished and a bus station has been constructed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main changes between the maps: the bus stops were replaced by a bus station, the shared car park became staff-only, and a separate public car park was added. You also mention the two roundabouts and the continued Hospital Road connection, so the response addresses the key features. However, the opening claim that road access was “same” is misleading because the 2010 layout includes roundabouts and new bus-station access. Some locations are also unclear: the public car park is east of Ring Road, not simply “right side of the hospital,” and the staff car park is east of Hospital Road rather than opposite the bus station. A clearer overview and more precise descriptions of these changes would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly sensible time sequence, moving from the 2007 arrangement to the 2010 changes, and the repeated contrast between bus stops and a bus station helps the reader follow the main comparison. However, the ideas are presented as one continuous paragraph, with no clear separation between the overview and the details. Some links are abrupt or unclear, such as “Major Changes seen were the Parking Lot and Bus Station,” followed by several separate location details. The opening statement also conflicts with the later description of major developments. Organise the response into an overview and two comparison paragraphs, and use clearer links such as “By 2010” and “In addition” to show how each feature relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing maps, including “connected,” “bus stops,” “bus station,” “roundabouts,” and “staff car parking.” These terms communicate the main changes, but the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or repetitive. For example, “parking lot” is used for both car parks, while “major development” and “proper bus station” are vague or evaluative rather than precise descriptions. There are also spelling errors in “hopital,” “Althoug,” and “mad,” which reduce accuracy. Use map-specific terms consistently and choose neutral language that identifies the function and position of each facility; this would make the description more precise and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including “Although the Hospital is still connected through hospital road while Ring Road is passing around the hospital,” and uses past-tense forms to describe the maps. However, sentence control is uneven. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error (“road access … are same”), and “There were six bus stops while a big parking lot…” is an incomplete sentence because the second clause lacks a verb. The “Although … while” construction is also not formed correctly, and several sentences begin with lowercase letters or use inconsistent capitalization. Practise building complete comparison sentences with accurate agreement and past-tense verbs, and check punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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