Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The map illustrates the road access to a city hospital in 2007 to 2010 lets i will summarise this map.

In the first map the map is showing what changing happened in the second map 2007 to 2010 and we have to answer of this map.

Fisrt of all, in 2007 a bus stop was far from the city hospital but in 2010 the bus stop was near the hospital road, second the car park staff and public was joint in 2007 but in 2010 the public car park and the staff car park was seperate.

Second the ring road was not changed in 2007 to 2010, in 2007 the hospital road had a little bit routes but in 2010 the hospital road had many routes and in 2007 there was no changed in city road but in 2010 the city road had may routes for example, bus station city road and more things round about

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two years and mention several relevant changes, including the separation of staff and public parking and the addition of roundabouts. However, the response only minimally reports the map’s main features, and some details are inaccurate: the bus stops were not moved nearer to the hospital road; they were removed and replaced by a bus station west of Hospital Road. The new public car park was on the east side of Ring Road, while the existing car park became staff-only. The overview is unclear, and the claim that City Road gained “many routes” is not supported. The response is also 148 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a clear overview and accurately describe the major changes and locations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by time period, with phrases such as “in 2007” and “in 2010,” and the reader can identify that you are comparing the maps. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the opening repeats the task, the second paragraph gives little useful information, and the final paragraph combines several changes in a confusing way. Connectors such as “First of all” and “Second” do not consistently show how the details relate, and the long final sentence is difficult to follow. Use a concise introduction, a separate overview, and body paragraphs grouped by related changes—for example, parking and public transport, then road access.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant map terms, such as “ring road,” “hospital road,” “car park,” and “round about.” These help communicate the general topic. However, the range is repetitive, and several word choices are inaccurate or unclear: “bus stop was far from the city hospital” misdescribes its position, while “had a little bit routes” and “had many routes” do not precisely describe the road changes. Spelling errors such as “Fisrt,” “seperate,” and “may” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of map verbs and location phrases, such as “was replaced by,” “was located to the west of,” “was converted into,” and “provided direct access to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use mostly simple sentence patterns and make an attempt to compare the years, but frequent errors in sentence construction and basic grammar sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The map illustrates … in 2007 to 2010 lets i will summarise” combines incompatible clauses, and “the car park staff and public was joint” has problems with word order, agreement, and verb form. The final sentence also runs several ideas together without effective punctuation. There is little variety in sentence structures, and tense and article use are not consistently controlled. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then combine related details with accurate clauses—for example, “In 2010, the shared car park was divided into separate staff and public facilities.”

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