Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two maps provide information about how the layout had changed thoughout the period of the road access to a city hospital in the years 2007 and 2010.

IN 2007, there was the bus stop all along the hospital Rd . however , it was

relocateted on the west with an extantion and replaced its place with two roundabout in 2010. in addition in the old map there was a car park public and the staff on the south west of the hospital , however the new map shows that they were separated where the public car park located on the right of the hospital and place of staff car park reamaind the same place . there was no changement on the centre area of the city hospital.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the period and mention several relevant changes, including the bus facilities, the separation of the car parks, and the addition of roundabouts. However, the response only partially covers the maps: it does not give a clear overview of the main changes, and some details are inaccurate or unclear. In 2007, the bus stops were on both sides of Hospital Road, not “all along” it; by 2010 they had been replaced by a bus station to the west. The public car park was added east of Ring Road, rather than simply being “on the right” of the hospital. The response also contains only 128 words, below the required 150. Add a concise overview and describe the locations and road connections more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you move from the 2007 layout to changes in 2010, and use contrast markers such as “however” and “in addition.” Nevertheless, the response has no clear paragraphing or distinct overview, so the reader must work to identify the main comparison. Several ideas are crowded into one long sequence, and the contrast between the old and new layouts is not consistently expressed. For example, “relocateted on the west with an extantion and replaced its place with two roundabout” combines multiple changes without making their relationships clear. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, using clear references to each year and linking each change to its location.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “layout,” “car park,” “bus stop,” and “roundabout,” and attempt to describe change with “separated” and “replaced.” However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “thoughout,” “relocateted,” “extantion,” “reamaind,” and “changement.” Some location phrases are also imprecise: “on the right of the hospital” is less suitable than “east of Ring Road,” while “all along” does not accurately describe the bus stops. Build a reliable set of map-description terms, including “was converted into,” “was added,” “to the west of,” and “direct access from,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, particularly with “however” and “where,” but the response relies on a narrow range of structures and many sentences are difficult to follow. There are problems with articles and number, as in “the bus stop” and “two roundabout,” and with verb forms and sentence construction in “they were separated where the public car park located.” The opening sentence also has an awkward tense and structure: “how the layout had changed thoughout the period of the road access.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including “IN 2007” and spaces before punctuation. Practise accurate past-tense passive forms such as “was added” and “were replaced,” and use shorter sentences to express each map change clearly.

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